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In the modern era, English has a momentous role to hone communication ability of pupils


Afdhel 14 / 21 1  
Oct 6, 2016   #1
IELTS Writing Task 2 Regarding Advantages and Disadvantages

In the modern era, the English has a momentaus role to hone communication ability of pupils. Some professionals claim that mastery of English encourage the student to enlarge knowledge. I firmly believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks regarding this case.

For instance, the blooming of English in science field has compelled students to assimilate with the matters using English text such as books, audio videos, and articles. Most experts assess the capability of language in line with creativity. This view based on due to the capability of language can stimulate the power of right brain. If students do not reach educational language from earlier grade, so they will left behind in literacy. Publication of science in advanced century often use English rather than the other languages.

However, there are merits why studying of British can be instituted in primary school. Firstly, students will be easier to comprehend textbooks using the English. For instance, the furtherance of technology provides many opportunities to acquire the English articles as well as softcopy of a book on the internet by free. Secondly, learning English since elementary school will create student be more confident to face the future.

Finally, the mastery of the English will generate students easier to interact with the others in the world to exchange and share ideas.

In conclusion, according to these arguments, it seems that there are strong benefits of learning English in primary school rather than secondary school. Globalization should produce school to yield foreign language class in the earliest level.

sasariri 17 / 25  
Oct 6, 2016   #2
Hi Afdhel..
Let me give some advice..

In the modern era, the English has a momentausmomentous ....

Publication of science in advanced century often uses English rather than ...

... merits why studying of Britishenglish can be instituted ...

English articles as well as softcopy soft copy of a book ...

Good Job
I hope it is helpful..
goldieu 5 / 8  
Oct 6, 2016   #3
Hi Afdhel,
I have some advice for you

- In the modern era, the English has a momentausmomentous role to hone ...
- ... merits why studying of British can be ...
- ... many opportunities to acquire the English articles (...) on the internet byfor free
- Finally, the mastery of the English will (..) to interact with the others in the world ...

Hope it helps :)
hasbi 29 / 42 23  
Oct 6, 2016   #4
Hi.,.Nousha
your IELTS writing is great, you have presented and organized the ideas appropriately. however, here some advice for you in order to improve your writing in the future. practice make perfect!

in the introduction, you have restated the prompt with your own words. But, the word "English" in your introduction make a sense in your writing. let's look the question: "All children should study a foreign language , starting in the earliest grades" remember that foreign language is not only English. so. if you restate/paraphrase it using English is totally inappropriate. it would be better f you paraphrase it with changing the sentence form without change the meaning.

turning to first body paragraph, i can follow what do you mean and what do you want to say. However, where is the topic sentence or the main idea of your paragraph?. there are several views/opinions that unclearly state, such as "Most experts assess the capability of language in line with creativity". reread how to fully developed example.

make sure how to use an article. in your essay "power of right brain" it should be "power of the right brain".

there are two kinds of articles (THE, AN/A). They use to refer to specific or particular nouns
a/an is used to change or modify non-specific or non-particular nouns.

the = definite article

a/an = indefinite article

For example, if I say, "Let's watch the video," I mean a specific video.
If I say, "Let's watch a video," I mean any book rather than a specific video

if we look the third paragraph, you have a well-structure paragraph. using complex sentence and sequence in each sentence in order to organize your ideas. Unfortunately, it needs an explanation/supporting ideas in each idea to make it clear. in this paragraph, there is lack an example to support your explanation. in order to get an explanation of your writing, just keep asking yourself. for instance "the mastery of the English will generate students easier to interact with the others in the world to exchange and share ideas" . for an explanation, ask yourself how to master in english can make students easier to interact with others.

good luck


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