IELTS TASK 2 : Modern forms of communication; 'electronic letter'

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Undoubtedly, the movement of modern forms of communication has changed better, which help people to interact to others, such as email and messaging without limitation time. I totally agree that using of these soft devices have cut much of time people need to see with their relatives. However, it is had some demerits on their social lives.

Mentioned to societies life style, they constantly use these kinds of electronic letter for making fellowship or just continuing theirs what they already had. Obviousness, there are other ways like social media that they could to use it for meeting theirs buddies such as Twitter and Facebook, also make the communication become feasible and limitless of time.

Another perspective, using of these facilities has influenced netizens to keep themselves becoming unsociable. It caused they were swept away by virtual atmosphere, so they do not do much social live interactions with others. The consequence of this case made some people become geek, as too much of using email and messaging, without direct contacts. However, people have had own minded to keep connection with their friends as a good relationship, meet them and talk by face to face directly.

In conclusion, I admittedly and strongly agree that the merits of email and messaging have reduced amount of ours time to communicate to. Besides, we need to make sure for the real gathering with our colleague.

Fact: Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends.
Opinion: This has had a negative effect on their social lives.
Task: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Working with the intro, you simply paraphrase those points above. Plus, a hook, which is short, clear and catchy :D

Hi...


... I am afraid that this is not appropriate linking conjunction.


.. I think using citizen or people is better while your prompt mention people as general instead of internet user solely ~>

This is called dangling participle. How to solve this? Visit this link:usu.edu/markdamen/writingguide/10dangpt.htm


or Obviously ???


tooo looong, giving more work to the readers as they needs to memorize things. Possible solution: Break it into two sentences or more.

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yes Mr. , I will pay attention for those in the next essays. :)


like this one --> "Mentioning to societies life style.. " isn't right?


:( I should did it
anyway, enormous thanks of your comments on my essays Mr.Eddie :D