Fact: Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends.
Opinion: This has had a negative effect on their social lives.
Task: To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Working with the intro, you simply paraphrase those points above. Plus, a hook, which is short, clear and catchy :D
yes Mr. , I will pay attention for those in the next essays. :)
Mentioned to societies life style, they constantly use
This is called dangling participle.
like this one --> "Mentioning to societies life style.. " isn't right?
there are other ways like social media that they could to use it for meeting theirs buddies such as Twitter and Facebook, also make the communication become feasible and limitless of time.
tooo looong, giving more work to the readers as they needs to memorize things. Possible solution: Break it into two sentences or more.
:( I should did it
anyway, enormous thanks of your comments on my essays Mr.Eddie :D