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IELTS TASK 2 : Modern forms of communication; 'electronic letter'


aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 14, 2014   #1
Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Undoubtedly, the movement of modern forms of communication has changed better, which help people to interact to others, such as email and messaging without limitation time. I totally agree that using of these soft devices have cut much of time people need to see with their relatives. However, it is had some demerits on their social lives.

Mentioned to societies life style, they constantly use these kinds of electronic letter for making fellowship or just continuing theirs what they already had. Obviousness, there are other ways like social media that they could to use it for meeting theirs buddies such as Twitter and Facebook, also make the communication become feasible and limitless of time.

Another perspective, using of these facilities has influenced netizens to keep themselves becoming unsociable. It caused they were swept away by virtual atmosphere, so they do not do much social live interactions with others. The consequence of this case made some people become geek, as too much of using email and messaging, without direct contacts. However, people have had own minded to keep connection with their friends as a good relationship, meet them and talk by face to face directly.

In conclusion, I admittedly and strongly agree that the merits of email and messaging have reduced amount of ours time to communicate to. Besides, we need to make sure for the real gathering with our colleague.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 14, 2014   #2
Fact: Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends.
Opinion: This has had a negative effect on their social lives.
Task: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Working with the intro, you simply paraphrase those points above. Plus, a hook, which is short, clear and catchy :D
Abdurasul 32 / 86 4  
Apr 14, 2014   #3
However, it is had some demerits on their social lives.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 14, 2014   #4
Hi...

Obviousness

... I am afraid that this is not appropriate linking conjunction.

netizens

.. I think using citizen or people is better while your prompt mention people as general instead of internet user solely ~>

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of timepeople spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 14, 2014   #5
Mentioned to societies life style, they constantly use

This is called dangling participle. How to solve this? Visit this link:usu.edu/markdamen/writingguide/10dangpt.htm

Obviousness,

or Obviously ???

there are other ways like social media that they could to use it for meeting theirs buddies such as Twitter and Facebook, also make the communication become feasible and limitless of time.

tooo looong, giving more work to the readers as they needs to memorize things. Possible solution: Break it into two sentences or more.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 14, 2014   #6
Another perspective is that using of these facilities has influenced netizenscitizens to keep themselves becomingbe less sociableunsociable. It has caused they werethem swept away by virtual atmosphere, so they do not do much social live interactions with othershave a requirement to physically interact with one another. The consequence of this casephenomenon may makemade some people become geek, as too much of using email and messaging, without direct contacts. However, people have had own minded to keep connection with their friends as a good relationship, meet them and talk by face to face directly .
OP aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 15, 2014   #7
Fact: Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends.
Opinion: This has had a negative effect on their social lives.
Task: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Working with the intro, you simply paraphrase those points above. Plus, a hook, which is short, clear and catchy :D

yes Mr. , I will pay attention for those in the next essays. :)

aryaayra:
Mentioned to societies life style, they constantly use

This is called dangling participle.

like this one --> "Mentioning to societies life style.. " isn't right?

aryaayra:
there are other ways like social media that they could to use it for meeting theirs buddies such as Twitter and Facebook, also make the communication become feasible and limitless of time.
tooo looong, giving more work to the readers as they needs to memorize things. Possible solution: Break it into two sentences or more.

:( I should did it
anyway, enormous thanks of your comments on my essays Mr.Eddie :D


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