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Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to exchange of information


Annateee 2 / 11 1  
Mar 28, 2013   #1
Hi, everyone. I have wrote this essay but i have no idea how is it. I wouls like you to point out my mistakes and give me advices.

Thank you ! :)

Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies.
What are your views ?

It is undeniable that widespread use of modern technology and uncontrolled surf online to exchange information or materials as we move into the 21st century. Some people say that modern technology is totally benefit to human's life whereas others argue that it is a bane to all and sundry. In my perceptive, I have various reasons to support my stand which is modern technology has no completely benefits drawbacks to human's life ?

First and foremost, we know that modern technology includes mobile phones, devices, tablets and so forth as they become smaller size, larger capacity and more convenient for human compare to the past. In view of these characteristics, majority of the people bring their devices to everywhere at anytime. People can surf the Internet where they want to keep themselves up-to-date on the spot. Take e-newspaper as an example. Nowadays, most of the newspaper's company has upgraded and updated themselves and started the e-news for everyone to get the latest news that what happen around our surrounding. Besides, we can just click on the search engine to receive the newest and latest data or materials when we are doing research or projects intead of finding books in the library. In light of this, it helps us save a plenty of time and energy.

On the other hand, modern technology has drawbacks too. As a well say,' every coin has both sides' . Gen-Y or even 4-years-old kids have their own devices in this day and age. Playing games has no absolutely wrong because it can helps us relax our brain and immerse ourselves in a virtual world on the moment .However, some of the people do not know how to manage their time properly and spend most of the time on the screen . Modern technology is a case in point. Recently, there is a lot of youngsters are addicted to the online games such as Candy Crush. For instance, there is a girl in my country who always plays games and causes depression and she is discovered she has eye-sight problems. In view of this, we should blame modern technology has a greater advance or herself ? Think twice.

To put in a nutshell, there is pros and cons for everything , modern technolody has no exception too. In my opinion, people must strike the balance by using modern technology as there is no definately harm our lives. Last, but not least, we should always remember that we must able to control modern technology but not vise versa.

temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Mar 28, 2013   #2
As a well say ,' every coin has both sides'

"saying says..." will be the replacement.

Modern technology is a case in point .

this turns out meaninglesss...

thereis pros and cons for everything

are. .

there is no definately harm our lives

there is no defini tely harm to our lives
that was a great attempt overall :)
OP Annateee 2 / 11 1  
Mar 28, 2013   #3
Thank you !! :) I will bear in mind the mistakes that i did.
OP Annateee 2 / 11 1  
Mar 29, 2013   #4
moderator..can i get some comments from you ? :)
thanks !
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 31, 2013   #5
Some people say that modern technology is totally benefitingto human's life whereas others argue that it is a bane to all and sundry.

Some people believe that modern technology benefits the lives of people in every respect while others argue that it has brought in very negative effects to human society.

In my perceptive, I have various reasons to support my stand which is modern technology has no completelybenefits drawbacks(???) to human's life ?

... this is not presented clearly; sounds confusing with contradictory ideas : ( ... you need to rephrase this line;
In my personal view, I think modern technology has both positive and negative effects.

First and foremost, we know that modern technology includes mobile phones, devices, tablets and so forth as they become smaller size, larger capacity and more convenient for human compare to the past. In view of these characteristics, majority of the people bring their devices to everywhere at anytime.

.... this sentence is too very long... that distracts you and disturbs your flow.
OP Annateee 2 / 11 1  
Apr 2, 2013   #6
Thank you !!! I will bear in mind those mistake that I did :)
OP Annateee 2 / 11 1  
Apr 2, 2013   #7
Can i ask should be modern technology or modern tecnologies ? When should i use both of them ? Under what situation ? When can i use ..case in point ? Thanks !
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 2, 2013   #8
Well.... you can use both and both are correct. The only explanation I can give is that in general reference you use the word "technology" and when you want to be specific, you use "technologies". Naturally technology is the singular word and technologies is the plural :D

Examples;
The difference between then and now is modern technology... general reference
Modern technologies have changed our lives... here, you are more specific
Hope this helps :)
OP Annateee 2 / 11 1  
Apr 2, 2013   #9
Thank you :)
can i ask i hv used the "last but not least" in the last paragraph. But I don't know am I used it in a correct way to say ?


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