Hi Hamed :-) Let's see what we can do to further improve your paper :-)
New modern technologies have connected many people and cultures. Although some of the technologies has not reach to few areas in the world, most communication technologies such as Internet or medias have been reachable anywhere and could affect the way of living. In my opinion, technologies such as Television or Internet have connected people in the world and have influenced in many different cultures.- Hamed, you lost track of the keywords in the prompt so the full content of your discussion ended up wrong. The key to the prompt is this :
Modern Technology is creating a single world culture. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.
. You are therefore supposed to discuss the emerging single world culture that modern technology affords the people of today. Let me explain what is meant by a single world culture in this prompt so that you can revise your essay properly :-)
Consider the following Hamed, people all over the world dress in the same westernized manner. There are very few country's left that have not been penetrated by the internet and cable television which has allowed people to be strongly influenced by the traditions and culture of the more dominant American way of life. People have absorbed the Western culture world wide because of the far reaching influence of their celebrities, news programs, and other aspects of social life. This is normally done via the internet and television. That said, you will also notice that people are more westernized in thinking these days rather than traditional or cultural.
Read the news articles and notice how international events seem to have counterparts in various countries. One such event is the Occupy Wall Street movement that is currently being emulated in Hong Kong. These are all signs of a world that is beginning to develop a single culture. We are becoming more united as nations even if we are divided by a language because of the influence that modern technology has had in our lives. Our world is now almost singular in thought and mode of life because of the influence of globalized technology.
Hopefully, I was able to clearly explain to you about the basis of a single world culture and you can revise your essay using that guide. As of now, your essay answers the prompt but not totally. You speak of various cultures and social influences instead of concentrating on the single world culture. Try to discuss this from the point of view that people do not even realize that they are becoming a part of a single world culture because the influence of social media and technology in our lives results in a seamless absorption and practice of the culture of the westernized world.
Don't forget the opposing opinion. Supporting it with samples coming out of Communist China where the people are prevented from being influenced by the single world culture phenomenon.