Ielts ;Does modern technology make life more convenient, or otherwise?

"Does modern technology make life more convenient, or was life better when technology was simpler?"

In my point of view modern technology made our lifes a lot easier.
But to all positive things in life are also some drawbacks.

Finding information and acquiring knowledge is just a few clicks away.
With the introduction of the internet almost everything is digitalized.
Booking a holiday, finding a good restaurant , play on the stock market,
Are just a few samples of what can be done on the internet.
With the introduction of Google Street View we can actually
Visit a city without even going out of the house.
Modern technology also found its way in our transportation.
Cars are equipped with gps systems, parking assistance and some even have
The ability to automatically brake in case the driver doesn't notice danger in front.

On the other hand this modern technology is the cause of less hand labor.
Shops are being replaced by so called web shops , in which the ordered products get delivered to your home straight from the distribution depot.
Social wise the technology created a less personal way of communication.
Where people where meeting each other in the pub , they are now sending digital
Messages.

It will be a mather of finding the balance between technology an human interaction.
Don't let our way of living depend on technology but use it as a handy tool.

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1. Introduction
With the emergence of the internet technologies ....+ Your Position...(Intro Para)

2. Impact on Day to Day Activities and Transportation system ( Second Para )
Booking a holiday, finding a good restaurant , play on the stock market, Google Street View, & transportation.

3. Some Disadvantages
less hand labor.
Shops are being replaced
4. Conclusion.