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IELTS; modern telecommunication devices & their benefits to human


Apsari 7 / 20 1  
May 5, 2014   #1
Hello guys, long time we do not meet after my long weekend to take a breath. :)
So, like usual.. Give me your advice, please. :)
Thank you

Someone believes that modern telecommunication devices have many benefits to human, while others think otherwise. What is your opinion? Please discuss and use examples to support your own ideas.

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Some people think that new telecommunication tools have many positive impacts to citizens, but others do not think so. In my opinion, new telecommunication tools support many people in every subject of life, and people can connect with other personality appropriately. On other hand, such gadget as new tools can give negative impact to children.

To begin, the most famous of communication purpose is developing of human life especially in communicationmajor. Old people always need to communicate with their relatives' family or their partner. Communication tools were made by human and for a better of human life. For example, gadget is the best telecommunication today, we can use it for browsing internet, sending message and making video call. We are not only use it for communicating but people can also saving the data or calculating, people can do many things by their gadget only in the one hand, because gadget has small body and high technology.

On the other hand, adult people have to pay attention to children. The purpose of modern technology is not arranged by children because they do not know how to use gadget in right ways. Sons and daughters only know that they can play many games in gadget, they also do not know about the negative radiation. For instance, as I know that children have spent much time with their gadget to play games actually their eyes will against, several time ago, I met children that he has particular red eyes because he played gadget over 3 hours.

To sumup, discovery aboutnew telecommunication tools are improving human life. These tools will be useful equipment if citizens know how to use it.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
May 5, 2014   #2
To sumupsum up , discovery aboutnewabout new telecommunication tools are improving human life.

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dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
May 7, 2014   #3
Some people think that new telecommunication tools have many positive impacts toon peoplecitizens , but others do not think so.
In my opinion, new telecommunication tools support manyhel p people in every subjectaspect of life, and people can connect with other personality appropriatelyenabling people to stay connected with other people more efficiently and effectively.

On other hand, such gadget as new tools can give negative impact to children.

In your previous sentence you already stated your opinion and it was the other side of what you have written above. So this sentence sounds controversial. What is your real opinion? You need to tell that to the reader.


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