My mom passed away; Sad emotional experience

I want to share with you a sad emotional experience.

When I was 18 year-old, I had already a boy friend, It was my birthday the man said to me he did not have money to go out with me,and he decided to go with me next week; and then, I accepted his proposition. Next week came and we went to a beautiful restaurant ate something new. After that, we left the restaurant, and we went together at his home. Imagine what is going to happen after? At the same time, my sister in law came and called my name behind the door and said to me, you know dear your mother just pass away. I was so surprise to hear that. I was crying like a baby, I did not know if my mother left me. The man pick me up home and saw my sister crying. It was a sad emotional experience in my life.

you need to make sure your verbs are in the right tense like "The man pick (picked ) me up home"

... I changed punctuation



The next week came and we went out to a beautiful restaurant and enjoyed trying new dishes.


... you don't have to say you left the restaurant after dinner because it is implied.


... you need to pay attention to punctuation!


I was so shocked to learn that


.... I guess this man is your boyfriend

I know what you want to express. But you should more focus on your mother's death and how that changes you!