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TASK 1 - MONEY SPENT ON BOOKS IN FOUR EUROPEAN COUNTRIES


fijarakbar25 11 / 13 2  
Jan 14, 2016   #1
The amount of money spent on book expenses in four distinctive European Countries from 1995 to 2015 is measured by US Million Dollars and presented by line graph.

It's evident that the figure shows an upward trend of whole four countries; Germany, France, Italy and Austria in which most money spent was occurred among People of German during all frame times, while the lowest value was gained by Austrian.

To begin with, Germany and French stood at 80 and around 55 respectively, however both experienced different alternates in which German gradually increased peaking at 90 in 1999 but was followed by a slight decline subsequently. Afterwards, it revived up to 90 remaining the highest point over the period. Next, French increased slightly during three initial years, 1995 to 2001, reaching a peak at 70 then continuously rose during following period just under German.

Meanwhile, 1997 shown incline in two remaining countries. But there was a slight fall experienced by Italy in 1999 then continued by steadily growth until the last period. Austria which was the lowest rate at the initial, turned out to cross different path in 2003 and obtained higher level than Italy.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 14, 2016   #2
Muhammad, your report overview is incomplete. You need to divide your information into 3 sentences otherwise your introduction will not fall under the acceptable parameters of the essay test. You should have at least 3 sentences, with a maximum of five, based upon the provided information in the introduction. So your introduction is unacceptable at this point.

Your whole essay suffers from a formatting problem. If you look at the examples of the IELTS Writing Task 1 examples here, you will see that all of the essays are divided into at least 3 paragraphs with each paragraph discussing a different aspect of the chart. You have failed to do that. Since you are presenting only one solid paragraph to the examiner, this response will be seen more as a statement rather than a summary report of the provided information. Your work will not get a passing grade in the actual test if you opt to use this format.

While you do have grammatical problems in the essay, the major problem it has is in the formatting so I want you to concentrate on fixing the format before we address the grammar issues. It is useless to fix the grammar if the essay will fail due to formatting and content problems.


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