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# Money spent on FAST FOOD IN BRITAIN (IELTS TASK1)

Nov 15, 2012   #1
The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

This chart shows that high income group prefer to consume hamburgers as average income group.Therefore, they spend much more for it about 45 pence per person per week compared with average income group (just over 30 pence).Unlike this,the low income group mostly spend for fish and chips around 18 pence.Besides, hamburger expenditures in this group make up only 14 pence.In addition,the most expense on fish and chips consumption is in the average income group and it account for 25 pence.Moreover, spending on pizza in this group 3 times less (roughly 13 pence) compared with hamburger expenses.By the way,low income group also spend minimum for pizza consumption around 8 pence.Differently,in the outlays of high income group on fast foods, pizza (approximately 20 pence) prevail over fish and chips (about 18 pence).
As shown in the graph,the consumption of hamburgers per person per week have increased dramatically about fivefold,from 95 gr to 320gr,between 1970-1990 years.Similarly, the consumption of pizza have been increased around from 20 gr to 280 gr.However, these two fast food lines in this graph have been increased as straight proportional.On the contrary, the line of fish and chips has been in wavy form.If we say clearer,the most consumption of fish and chips has been 300gr per week in 1970.It has declined steadily up to 200 gr in 1985,but then it has risen slightly again up to 220gr in 1990.
In conclusion,regardless of income,the hamburger gain first place in the fast food ration of people in Britain.It is followed by fish and chips,however, it's consumption line has been fluctuating on years.The pizza consumption lag behind from other fast foods,but it has already been increasing steadily.

Nov 15, 2012   #2
(You should write an introduction first. Briefly write about the information shown in the figures. Mention place and time, as well. At the end of the introduction write a general trend) This chart shows that high income group preferred to consume hamburgers as average income group.Therefore, they spend spent (you should use past tens as the data were collected over 1990 and earlier) much more for on it (about 45 pence per person per week) compared with average income group (just over 30 pence). Unlike this,the low income group mostly spent for on fish and chips by around 18 pence. Besides, hamburger expenditures in this group make up only 14 pence.In addition,the most expense on fish and chips consumption is belonged to in the average income group and it accounted for 25 pence.Moreover, spending on pizza in this group 3 was three times less than that on(roughly 13 pence) compared with hamburger expenses.By the way,low income group also spent minimum for on pizza consumption by around about 8 eight (write the numbers under 10 in words) pence.Differently In contrast,in the outlays of high income group on fast foods, pizza (approximately 20 pence) prevailed over fish and chips (about 18 pence).
As shown in the line- graph,the consumption of hamburgers per person per week have dramatically increased by about fivefold,from 95 gr to 320gr, between during 1970 to 1990 years.Similarly In the same period of time, the consumption of pizza have been increased around from about 20 gr to 280 gr.However, these two fast food lines in this graph have been increased (use synonym) as straight proportional (revise this phrase). On the contrary, the data describing the consumption of the line fish and chips did not show a constant trend through 1970 to 1990. has been in wavy form. If we say clearer To clarify ,the most consumption of fish and chips has been was 300gr per week in 1970 (suggestion: "The amount of fish and chips consumption experienced a peak in 1970 (300 gr per week)"). It has slightly declined steadily up to 200 gr in 1985,but then it has risen gradually rose slightly again up to 220gr in 1990.
Nov 15, 2012   #3