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Money for students sports vs library activies


Harikumarsharma 2 / 5  
Nov 3, 2011   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Students are not fixed vessel to be filled with bookish knowledge rather they are person deserving for participation in field other than reading books such as involving in sports. I advocate for equal investment of money by university in libraries and sports' activities since sports help to maintain good mental as well as physical health and sports are integral part of curriculum.

Firstly, sports are very beneficial for studying students because it provides great chance to amuse themselves. As a result students forget their stress of study and other daily life problems which are hindrance on effective learning. Playing game also boosts our physical health .It is said that healthy body is healthy mind. For instance, in Nepal, one research shown that learning process is effective in sport students than non sport students.

Secondly, sports are also vital part of curriculum and just enhancing reading facilities, the whole academic programme becomes disabled since learning from reading books and sports are two sides of a single coin. That sprit can be only fulfilled by investing equal amount of money on libraries and sports. For example, in my university, equal amount of money has allocated to enhance two fields and the academic achievement has been increasing since equal emphasis.

Some people argue for more emphasis on libraries than sport since they do not know mutual relation of book learning and sport.

To sum up, libraries and sports are two equally important part of the most of curriculum and attempting to get good result without considering this fact is unwise.


  • Would you please suggest me and I would be so greatful for your kind help.

SueHeck 2 / 10  
Nov 4, 2011   #2
Oh dear, where do I start? "a great chance to amuse..." lose this, it somehow sounds...dirty? I think many of the problems are ESL issues (English as a Second Language).

Your premises are: Sports benefit students through better mental health. Premise 2: College is a time when good mental health is difficult to achieve 3: Therefore, colleges need to continue to fund sports and athletic facilities to ensure good mental health.

The Nepal part is good-I would expand upon this study, and how the Nepal (your?) culture treats university level sports, athletic facilities, funding etc. This would be far more interesting to me than a shallow summary of U.S. athletic funding.
OP Harikumarsharma 2 / 5  
Nov 5, 2011   #3
Thank you so much for your precious suggestion and I will keep them in my mind.I hope you will help me in comming days as well.
OP Harikumarsharma 2 / 5  
Nov 5, 2011   #4
Thank you so much for you precious suggestion and hope you will help me in coming days as well.I have heard about a research regarding improved academic performance but I am not sure.
clin93 1 / 4  
Dec 4, 2011   #5
You need to review your introduction because it is not clear.For example you can put it this way(this is a suggestion)_Students should not only be bookworms but they also need to actively participate in outdoor activities such as sports.

Also check the conclusion,it does not clearly show your stand


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