then lead to a rather controversial issue surrounding inequality.
Although this seems to be problematic, there are more beneficial effects.
- I would rather write " Although it may seem unfair, the current phenomenon is likely to have more beneficial than adverse effects."
Sports professionals are also taken into that part.They are not only a positive incentive for their followers to do physical activities, but also entertaining their fans in game competitions.
- Sport professionals also take part in that. They are not only a positive incentive for their followers to do physical activities, but also an entertainment for their fans in game competitions.
The last sentence of conclution is not very clear, especially how it is related to the whole essay.
Besides, as shadman19922 said, you should replace the word "afford".
I hope I was useful.