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MONTH IS THE PEOPLE - COME TO THE MARS YET


bismillah 15 / 29 1  
Sep 29, 2016   #1
In the near future,the plan of Nasa will despatch the thousand of people come to Mars. After months of anticipation ,space CEO Elon Musk has at least revealed his plan for making human a multiplanetary species by sending crews to Mars and beyond.Still,things have not been entirely smooth sailing for space X,with recent launch pad explosion potentially casting the shadow on their Mars ambitions,And keep in mind that when it comes to human missions to Mars , the vision's have been in the works for quite a while the last 70 years straight.The delay is at least in part technical.A trip to the red planet is like visiting an even more inhospitable Antartica,and its unbreathable atmosphere is less than two percent of what you had find at Everest's summit. Never mind the fact that you have to fly at least a year,round-trip,to get there in the first place.
MFES2016 5 / 6 2  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi bismillah
i would like to note you some advises
hope it works

>> making a human
>> a multiplanetarymultip lanetary species
>> you had findfound at Everest's summit
Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 29, 2016   #3
Hello Bismilah
There are some advice from me

After months?????? of anticipation
...... i think you mean is MOON

least revealed his plan for making human ...
.... who his? you have to mention his name before you change with pronoun

things have not been entirely smooth ...
.... what things??? you have to explain clearly before

the vision's have been in the works
.....there is no explain about vision in your essay

the works for quite a while the last 70
......article (a)????? for what???


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