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Mott Hall Bridges Academy opened in 2012 that have simple target: open a school to close a prison


Mathew8 5 / 12  
Oct 10, 2016   #1
Why open a school? To close a prison - Nadia Lopez

Mott Hall Bridges Academy opened in 2012 that have simple target: open a school to close a prison. It is located in the Brownsville section of Brooklyn, one of the most underserved and violent neighborhoods in all of New York city. In the early opening, they face numerous of challenges like finding teacher who can emphatize with the complexities of disadvantaged community, and lack of funding technology, low parental involvement, and neighborhood gangs that recruit childern as early as fourth grade. For the first class, they just have 45 children who want to join in this school. Some student in ths school have different goal such as be engineers, scientists, entrepreneurs, and even leaders who can and will take over this world. As a result, by some struggle process, they have had three graduating classes, a a 98 per cent graduating rate. It make this school going to some of the most competitive high schools in New York City.
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Oct 10, 2016   #2
hi...

Mott Hall Bridges Academy was opened in 2012 thatwhich have simple target that is open a school ...
In the early openingtime , they face numerous of challenges likesuch as finding teacher who can emphatizeemphasize with the complexities of disadvantaged disadvantage community,communities , lack of funding technology, low ... (your sentence too bulky, so you can write your sentence in 2 or 3 sentences)

Some student in ths(misspelling) school have different goal such as ...
... had three graduating classes, aat 98 per cent graduating rate. It make this school going to some of the most (...) in New York City.

thank you
naelendra 6 / 10 3  
Oct 10, 2016   #3
Matthew hallo I want to give some advice on words in your writing

... finding teacher who can emphatize ( emphas ize) with the complexities ...
... neighborhood gangs that recruit childern (children) as early ...
Some student in ths( thi s) school have different ...
hirani03 36 / 50 5  
Oct 10, 2016   #4
Hello Mathew8 :)

... opened in 2012 that havehad simple target: ...
It is was located in the Brownsville section of Brooklyn,...
In the early opening, they facefaced numerous of challenges like hard in finding teacher who (...) and neighborhood gangs that recruitrecruitedchildernchildren as early as fourth grade.

.., they just have had 45 children who wantwanted to join in this school. Some studentstudents in thsthis school havehad different goalgoals such as bebeing engineers, scientists, ...

... struggle process, they havehad had three graduating classes, a a 98 per cent graduating rate. It makemade this school going to some ...
ReskiRamadani88 43 / 57 5  
Oct 28, 2016   #5
Hello mathew, i will give you suggestion:
1. Be care full tense using, please make it clear

Mott Hall Bridges Academywas opened in 2012 that ...

It iswas located in the Brownsville ...

they was be facedface numerous of challenges...

2. Be care full with your spelling

the complexities of disadvantaged disadvantage community ,communities,

3. Be are full singular.plural tense

Some studenstudents in the school have different


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