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W1:The movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future .


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May 14, 2022   #1
A glance at the graph provided reveals the number of people in 3 nations who are fond of living in the metropolis rather than living in the countryside over the 25 years from 2000 .

It is evident that all three countries have had a steady increase in the number of migrants through many years . Particularly, country C has the largest proportion compared to 2 countries A and B respectively .

In 2000 , around 10 million people of nation B chose the city as the ideal place to live and lower than 3 million people as opposed to nation A . Whilst , just a small proportion of nation C nearly 5 million people moved from the city at the early stages . Experienced for 2 decades , this was followed by a period of exponential growth with citizens in country C reaching the same figure as country A . The figure in country B increased steadily ; however , the population gap was just one-quarter of that of the two remaining countries .

By 2025 , the population in nation C is expected to be nearly 100 million people . To be specific , the figure 's nation C has a steep rise over 5 years and nation A also goes up slightly above 85 million people . By contrast , nation B's growth is far less striking than the other two countries and will have stability in the figure during the same period.



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May 15, 2022   #2
Never ask the reader to look at the image reference in any case. The assumption for this and all task 1 report analysis essays is that the writer will be delivering a comprehensive and coherent discussion, without the need to look at the image. The assumption is always that the reader does not have any access to the image and therefore, will be reliant on the ability of the report to help the reader create a mental image as a reference point.

The writer has provided misinformation in the presentation which will affect the accuracy of the report. The numbers indicate the movement of people between the city and country areas. It does not at any time or any form refer to:

who are fond of living in the metropolis rather than living in the countryside

As such, the writer has a topic interpretation inaccuracy that will affect the TA score due to the misdirection of the discussion topic. He has also delivered only a semi accurate image representation since he only indicated the existence that a graph was included, but not the type of graph, which would have led to a more accurate summary information presentation.

The word count is 232 words, which is over the 200m maximum word count. The writer needs to learn to write shorter presentations as this is only a concise analysis and not an opinion presentation. It may not be possible to complete such a word count within 20 minutes during the actual test.


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