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Movies show us wonderful things and people who we cannot find in the real world


jerry 17 / 10  
Sep 2, 2008   #1
[Toefl essay] Explain why movies are popular.

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Nowadays, movies are very popular and become parts of our life. There are hundreds film made a year. We watch movie for many reasons.

First, movies show us wonderful things and people that we cannot find in the real world. We are always curious so we see the movie to explore what we have not ever though of. Science fiction movies gain lot of success because of this. Furthermore, movies provide what we expected in our world such as superman that helps people, drugs that can cure every disease. Second, some movies are very realistic. They tells about many problems that can happen to every one of us; moreover, they also how to solve those problems efficiently. Though there are some differences between movie and real life, we sometimes can apply what movies teach us to come over problems we meet. Third, movies are very effective in entertaining us. After a long day of working or studying, seeing a movie is a great idea. Movies can make us laugh; thus make our life more interesting. We cannot just go to work then eat then sleep. That life is so tedious. We need a little excitement, and we find that in movies. By providing us excitement, movies compensate for our daily life burden in studying, in working, etc. Whatever the changes maybe in many aspect of our life, I can be sure that movies still role an important part in making this world more exiting.

EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Sep 2, 2008   #2
"Nowadays, movies are very popular and become an important part of our lives . There are hundreds of films made each year. We watch movies for many reasons.

We are always curious so we see the movie to explore what we have not ever thought of. Science fiction movies gain lots of success because of this. Furthermore, movies provide what we desire in our world such as a superhero that helps people and drugs that can cure every disease.

They tell about many problems that can happen to every one of us; moreover, they also show us how to solve those problems efficiently. Though there are some differences between movies and real life, we sometimes can apply what movies teach us to overcome problems we meet.

Third, movies are very effective at entertaining us.

Movies can make us laugh, thus making our lives more fun, carefree, enjoyable(Choose a better adjective here.) . We cannot just go to work then eat and then sleep.

Whatever the changes may be in many aspects of our lives , I can be sure that movies stillplay an important role in making this world more exciting ."

If I had to give a grade, I'd probably give you a 5 on your content; you make good points and give good examples. I'd give a 2 for mechanics because of the spelling errors, grammatical mistakes, and word choice issues. But, that is why people come here: I'm not giving the grade :)

Keep up your hard work.


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