On contrast, there is another argument that museums should levy minimal charge.
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But there is another...should
have aI think museums should charge basic fee for entry and the government should use these funds for maintenance and update them regularly
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a basic... use these funds for the
upkeep of the museum .
I would discuss both the above opinions in my essay .
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will discuss both
these opinions in great detail within this essay .
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This is long enough for an introduction. But try to develop longer introduction statements in order to create a solid foundation for your main argument.accessible to everyone irrespective of their financial status.
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regardless of their financial status.
an entry fee only wealthy can afford which will not justify the educationsystem .
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the wealthy can... not justify the
support of education
argument .
based on economical status.
Entry to museums cannot be a taboo. There are various ways to make entry fee egalitarian .
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Entry to museums should not favor only one faction of society. If funds are necessary there are various ways to create a financially productive museum.Also, by levying fee based on age group would solve the issue to some extent. In India, some museums are free of cost, but they are not updated regularly.Government cannot fund lot of money on museums. It is much better to levy minimal fee than closing them or not able to maintain them in proper conditions. This might also gives people an insight into the importance of museums and eliminates misuse.
- One way to make a museum earn its keep is by charging a minimal fee for for group tours but not for individuals and students. The fee can be used to keep the exhibits updated and maintained. The government should not be expected nor are they capable of constantly providing funds for museum maintenance. It is much better to charge
a ... than closing the museum due to improper maintenance.
There are various ways to make entry fee affordable by everyone.
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This is a redundancy as you already mentioned this earlier in the essay.Work on developing the ideas regarding the need to charge a museum fee. The argument is quite short and lacks a hook to make the reader believe in what you are saying. There is plenty of room to develop the arguments of both sides. Take advantage of that in order to create a cohesive and informative paper. Overall, I would give this paper a 7 owing to the grammatical errors and under developed arguments.