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Music connects people and is also used as a therapy. Which type of music is the most important?


rajat2108 1 / 1  
Dec 7, 2016   #1
......Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Today, music has a lot of share in people's life. Some people though are limited just to listening of music but there are some other people too who take music it seriously and go for it as a profession and become musician. Music has been in our life from the time when we were born. Music comes under the field of Arts and Literature and has been considered very important. The musicians have always been given a important place everywhere whether from an Ancient period or Modern.

Music is also now been . There are certain beats which are even now getting used daily for various purposes like stress relief, headache or even for the sleeping disorders, making it important in not in only the entertainment purposes but for the problems, which are caused in the human body because of the brain's disorders and functioning, so there is a need for the music too. Without the skill and understanding of Arts and Literature, a human is considered as a Robot or an Animal. It has been said there is a need of understanding of music to a human so for its own good and also for shaping one's character.

Most of the countries have their own music background, in which some are actually very good, not only for the entertainment purposes but also for their relation with science. The classical music for India for example is very much appreciated, they have their own choice of instruments for their particular Ragas, Dhrupad and much more. The music is not a kind which makes you wanting to dance or something but it gives you a feeling of peace and calmness. Of course it can't help you with your workout sessions but for mental peace it is very much appreciated and listened by those who know it. This is the traditional music of India which even because of a high impact of western and international music has a strong place, and it is important for every country to not to neglect their own music, by all the parts of the world and the countries they have originated their music just like culture and they are all important and unique in their own ways. Although the international music should be listened and praised as well but the traditional has even more importance, it has the culture and the history hidden in its various branches and layers.

This was my first attempt in writing, please make corrections and do tell me the things I need to include

abdik 3 / 5 1  
Dec 7, 2016   #2
hello here is my notes:

to listening of music

but there are some other people too who take music it seriously !! i really didn't understand what do you want to say here.

well, you have a lot of grammatical mistakes and i think you have to go back to some basic english rules and what is the correct structure of an english sentence.

anyway keep working and i am sure you will improve
OP rajat2108 1 / 1  
Dec 8, 2016   #3
Thanks for the response, I saw that too after when I posted but couldn't edit

Some people though are limited just to listening of music but there are some other people too who take it seriously and go for it as a profession and become musician.

I wanted to delete the word myself

Where could I learn building sentences more?


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