IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Why national leaders should spend more money on public transportation

reducing traffic congestion

Essay topics: Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have argued that the authorities should utilise their funds and budgets on developing streets and highways rather than on public transportation areas. As far as I concerned, the advantage of investing in public transport systems always outweighs that of remain option.

On the one hand, a group of people think that the government should focus on improving their street and highway facilities since several reasons. First of all, having a better quality of them would raise the levels of safety for people and clear traffics. To be more specific, adding and enlarging more lanes and routes make not only fluent traffic of means of transportation but also declining in road mortality and injury rates. Secondly, enhancing on road networks helps restrain traffic congestion. Because of broad roads, everyone has maximum free-flowing traffics instead of limit of moving in rush hour times from 8.00 AM to 4.00 PM in Ho Chi Minh city and it is an outstanding example.

Although, investing in road networks possesses immediately potential advantages, it can not be compared with public transport. First reason is that high-capacity public transport can accommodate larger number of passengers in comparison with vehicles at same time. Take a bus has double size towards a sedan could carry forty people instead of four spaces as an clear example. Finally, a mode shift from private to efficient public transport systems contributes to a green environment. Besides, taking public transit, carpool or riding a bicycle play a vital role in progressing of low-carbon lifestyle.

It is obvious to me to conclude that national leaders should spend money on public transportation is a potential step to come to the sustainable development for high quality of social life.

Nguyen, your essay does not follow the discussion prompt as it is provided. This is a 5 paragraph essay that follows the 3 reasoning paragraph format to represent:

1. Public POV 1
2. Public POV 2
3. Personal POV
The way that you formatted the prompt paraphrase created a prompt deviation as you changed the discussion instruction from:

Prompt Version: Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Your Version: As far as I concerned, the advantage of investing in public transport systems always outweighs that of remain option.

There was never an instance in this essay when you discussed the two POV's in a manner that would show how these opinions influenced your point of view. You just decided to discuss your point of view. Even worse, your response changed the prompt topic later on in the presentation:

Original Topic: Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion.

Your Topic: Although, investing in road networks possesses immediately potential advantages, it can not be compared with public transport.\

The original prompt never asked you to compare the investment in roadwork with public transport so why did you do that? You clearly have a problem understanding English instructions which is why your essay kept moving away from the original instructions. This will result in a failing score during an actual test because you will not have properly delivered on the Task Accuracy requirements.

Please work on improving your English comprehension skills. Review the available essays at this forum so that you can better understand how to properly respond to the prompt requirements. Prompt deviations will never be good for your score during the actual test. It could result in an automatic failing grade in the end.