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IELTS - Natural Talent or Training with Hardwork ? Both Views


jayk 4 / 9  
Jan 22, 2012   #1
Q. It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay -

The world is full of exceptional talent that is why there has always been a considerable discussion about natural talent and training whenever people enthralled by a great performance from an artist or player.

These are players whose indelible performance always make people believe that they are blessed with skills. These exceptional players always find it easy to perform which

seems very difficult for other players especially in fields like sports, music and art. Good examples are Roger Federer who is a born tennis legend, belated Michael Jackson who

will always rule our heart as king of pop music.

However, there is a strong belief in our education system that with continued teaching and guided practice, any skill can be mastered. There are plenty of such examples of players who have proved time and again with their commitment towards training and practice that they are good in their field of work. For instance, one of the great cricket player Sachin Tendulkar is not always at its best in all his games but has always learned from his mistakes and achieved great milestones in cricketing world.

In my opinion, to a certain extent this is true that some people are born or blessed with unmatched skills which makes them perfectionist in their job especially when we consider

areas like sports, music and art. But it is always said " Practice makes a man perfect " , which is undoubtedly lot of people's formula of success who are focused and have desire

to perform.

mehak aijaz 2 / 4  
Jan 22, 2012   #2
its a very gud essay i think fulfilling all d criteria of essay writting one suggestion only if u write on the other hand( instead of however )there is a strong belief...

or however, on the other hand
cypress 8 / 18  
Jan 22, 2012   #3
Well done.However, you may want to improve your introduction
basawang 10 / 76  
Jan 23, 2012   #4
In my opinion, to a certain extent this is true that some people are born or blessed with unmatched skills which makes them perfectionist in their job especially when we consider areas like sports, music and art. But it is always said " Practice makes a man perfect " , which is undoubtedly lots of people's formulas of success who are focused and have desire to perform.

So which one is more crucial, talents or diligence? You did not tell the reader your conclusion.

Good luck
OP jayk 4 / 9  
Jan 24, 2012   #5
Thanks a ton Wang !!

Your reviews are making me think and improve.

I like the way you combined two sentences with same subject and yes, parallel structures are important too.
You are right, I have missed my opinion. I am sure diligence is very crucial in any field because even talented ones cannot ignore it.

I just need to work a little bit hard.

Great Support Wang, thanks you so much.

Best Regards,
Jay


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