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It is needless to use libraries because everyone can get all information they need on the Internet


Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

do we need libraries at all?



Some people these days argue that It is needless to use libraries because everyone can get all information they need on the Internet. I absolutely disagree with this idea.

In my view, it is extremely senseless to say that we no longer need libraries. I do not believe that we can go online anytime . What if we lived in uplands or in the countryside where there is no internet connection? In this case, if we don't have libraries and books, we will never be able to catch up with the latest news, and it is like we will live under the rock forever. Furthermore, there is no compelling reason why we should not go to the libraries to read books. It costs us nothing to read the books we love. By borrowing books from libraries, we can save ourselves a fortune.

I also disagree with the idea that we can easily access all information on the Internet. Nowadays, a range of people are using Internet to benefit themselves, even if they know what they are doing can harm others. For example, usually when you surf the Internet , you will see a lot of annoying advertisements, and they may disturb you and your search would be interrupted you. More seriously, they also can make your device viral if you accidentally click them. That's why the Internet can be convenient on one hand, but is not safe on the other hand.

In conclusion, we would make a huge mistake if we eliminate libraries out of our life. I think we should spend more time in the libraries because it is not only the place to borrow books, but you also can find information you need safely.

@Lonar213
Hi Lonar,
I'd like to give you some advice on your essay.
1.Idioms should not be used in essays. For example, you use "under the rock"
2.usually when you surf the Internet ---> when you usually ...
3.we eliminate libraries from our life.
4.I think we should spend more ... ------> I'm not sure that this sentence is suitable.

Thanks for reading! I hope you will do your best!
Dec 3, 2017   #3
Trang, this is a mere single opinion essay. It is not an emotional response essay. So your response should simply have been "I disagree with the statement made." You do not disagree with the idea because what was given in the prompt is a statement not an insinuation of an "idea". That is a simple mistake that is often made by new reviewers. You will need to brush up on the various discussion types for the IELTS essays so that you can avoid making similar mistakes in the future.

Avoid using English terms and idioms like "live under a rock". This is first and foremost, an academic essay. Therefore, there must be an emphasis on the proper academic development of your sentences and statements.

Limit your paragraphs to one discussion point at a time. Fully develop the topic sentence around the remaining 4 sentences by offering supporting reasons, information, and examples. Do not suddenly add information just to fill in the sentence count because that would lower the C&C score for your essay. As long as you write a minimum of 3 sentences, you will get a good score for the paragraph. It will not be very high but it will not be too low either.

You should also work on developing less long sentences and more short but intricate sentences in order to create complex sentences that will improve your GRA score. I would have structured the conclusion, which is your longest presentation that lacks sentences as:

My conclusion, is that libraries are still necessary in these modern times. It allows an ease of information access without advertising as the internet does.Additionally, everyone can access a library, but not everyone can access the internet. Therefore, I do not believe that libraries are no longer necessary in the internet age.

Conclude effectively by simply summarizing the discussion you presented. That is all you have to do because the concluding statement is a continuation of the opening paraphrase. This time, paraphrasing the discussion you presented instead.
Hi Trang, I would like to offer a paraphrasing of the original prompt for your reference.

In our modern technological age, the myriad of information is available via the internet. Which leads to some suggest that libraries could be substituted by this ultimate resource for students in learning or other academic purposes. In this essay, I strongly disagree with the topic and will present my arguments as follows.

Hope that helps.


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