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IELTS TASK 2 Negative Effects of tourism activities


andika06 11 / 10 3  
Jan 5, 2016   #1
Some people say that tourism has many negative effect on the countries that people travel. How true Is this statement ? what can tourist do to reduce the harmful effect of tourism on local culture and environment ?

The majority of citizens assumed that there are some unsavory impacts of tourism for destination countries. I personally believe toward this statement since a number of cultures became disappeared and replaceable by modern styles carried by the tourists. On the other hand, there are several solutions to minimize its detrimental effects.

These days, most of travelers visiting a site bring the dire effects for local people and traditions. A significant impact occurs on traditional value altered by western lifestyle. For example, the foreigners introduce elements that are not suitable with local cultures. Another serious consequence is the local community adopts poor behaviors such as consuming of the drugs and alcohol, increasing of prostitution's level on local area. In addition, there is also the new trend in which the cultures utilized for commercial commodities. For instance, local people constantly think about profit. I greatly agree tourism lead the negative impact for local community and environment.

In term of solutions, the government should be largely responsible. Firstly, the tourism ministry must create strict regulations for holiday makers spending holidays in the country like to impose a fine for travelers making violations. Secondly, Authorities have to maintain original cultures on each tourist area. They must encourage local residents to preserve traditional values without influenced of foreign customs.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that a number of inhabitants argue regarding to the drawbacks of tourism for their regions. However, I extremely believe that the original cultures have been eroded by foreign life styles and values. Afterwards, there are some possible solutions that can be done by the government to tackle the problem so the benefits of tourism are still enjoyed.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 5, 2016   #2
The majority of citizens assumed that there are some unsavory NEGATIVE impacts of tourism for destination countries. I personally believe toward this statement since a number of cultures became HAVE disappeared and replaceable HAVE BEEN REPLACED by modern styles carried BROUGHT by the tourists. On the other hand HOWEVER, there are several solutions to minimize its detrimental effects.

These days, most of travelers visiting a site bring the dire ILL effects for local people and traditions. A significant impact occurs on traditional valueS altered by THE western lifestyle. For example, the foreigners introduce elements that are not suitable with FOR local cultures. Another serious consequence is the local community adopts poor behaviors such as consuming of the drugs and alcohol, increasing of THE LEVEL OF prostitution's level on IN A local area. In addition, there is also the new trend in which the cultures utilized IS USED for commercial commodities. For instance, local people constantly think about profit. THAT IS WHY I greatly agree THAT tourism CAN lead TO A the negative impact for THE local community and environment.

In termS of solutions, the government should be largely responsible FOR ITS IMPLEMENTATION. Firstly, t The tourism ministry must create strict regulations for holiday makers spending holidays in the country like to impose SUCH AS IMPOSING a fine for travelers making PERFORMING violations. Secondly, A THEN authorities have to maintain original cultures on IN each tourist area. They must encourage local residents to preserve traditional values without influenced of AND NOT BE INFLUENCED BY foreign customs.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that a number of inhabitants argue regarding to the drawbacks of tourism for their regions. However, I extremely believe that the original cultures have been eroded by foreign life styles and values. Afterwards HOWEVER, there are some possible solutions that can be done by the government IN ORDER to tackle the problem so the benefits of tourism are CAN still BE enjoyed BY THE COUNTRY .
Riiskacha03 31 / 34 5  
Jan 7, 2016   #3
impacts of tourism foron destination countries

it is more appropriate to use "on" rather than for to express the effect on something.

... travelers WHO ARE visiting a site (what kind of site?) bring the dire effects for ...
it would be nice to re-write it as " ... travelers who are visiting a tourism site bring dire effects for ... "

Another serious consequenceSisARE the local community adopts poor behaviors such as consuming of the drugs and alcohol, increasing of prostitution's level on local area.

There are two consequences there, adopt poor behaviors and increase the prostitution's level.
try to make your writing more consistent. An illustrate, since you use "the local community adopts poor behaviors ...", you should use the similar form of verb in the second factor, so write it as "increase the prostitution's level".

... since a number of cultures became ...

... ministry must create strict regulations for holiday makers (without space) spending holidays ... (3rd paragraph)


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