The birds is one of carnivore animal in the world, which is hunting a fish as daily food for live. Birds make one of body part, called their noses, to catch many fishes in rivers, ocean, or lakes. Another function of their noses is dangerous sense. But now, pile of plastic in the sea especially is cause apprehensive problem for the environment and sea birds mainly.
The amount of plastic in the sea is more than 5 trillion pieces floating around world's seas. It can offend the way of food chain. Another negative impact of this pollution is resulting sulphure compound which it can threatent many marine plants and animals, such as algae, crustaceans, and seabirds also. To evidence this hypothes, the researchers is using 13.350 birds in 55 experiment. The result is sulphure compound from plastic make the seabirds sniff out to search for food quickly. Because the smell of plastic same like a food for the seabirds.
Finally plastic in the ocean make negative aspect for the environment, then also it can make the seabirds is using the sight and the scent to eating trash as their food normally.
Source : newscientist
Hi! I have some feedback for you!
The birds is one of carnivore animal in the world, which is ...
As you mentioned sea bird in the next of your sentence, so it will be better if you start your first sentence with the same word since this article is talking about the bird living near the sea, not the usual species of bird. So it should be
The sea birds...
Birds make one of body part, called their noses, to catch many fishes in rivers, ocean, or lakes. should be
... body part, called noses/ peak (you can use both), to catch their ...
Another function of their noses is dangerous sense. should be
... of their peak is to sense the danger.
The birds is one of carnivore animals in the world,[dependent relative clause does not separate by punctuation] which is huntinghuntsa fish as daily food for liveliving/surviving. . Birds make one of body part, called their noses, to catch many fishes in rivers, ocean, or lakes.[no problem in singular/plural issue, but from function and structure this not understandable] Another function of their noses is dangerous sense.
... in the sea especially is causeS apprehensive problem ...
NEED TO CONCERN ON SINGULAR PLURAL ISSUE AT FIRST. REVISE YOUR WRITING SINCE THE SAME PROBLEM IS FOUND ON THE REST OF THAT, THEN PAY ATTENTION ALSO ON THE FUNCTION OF EACH OF YOUR SENTENCES
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... compound from plastic make the seabirds sniff out to ...
Finally plastic in the ocean make negative aspect for (...) make the seabirds is using the sight and ...
hi, these are my thought towards your summary
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... their noses is to sense dangerous thing .
... especially is causes apprehensive problem for ...
... compound which it can threatentthreaten many marine plants ...
To evidence this hypotheshypotheses , the researchers (...) in 55 experiments .
... of plastic same likeas a food for the seabirds.
Finally plastic in the ocean makegives negative aspect (...) make the seabirds is usinguse the sight and the scent...
thanks and good luck
Hi Yurike,
Here some advice for your writing
You can use article "the" to something that we know that is being discussed. So, in my opinion, in first sentence is not appropriate to use article the.
The birds is one of carnivore animalS in the world, which is huntinghunt a fish as daily food for live.life .
The birds make one ...
... noses is TO GIVE SIGN ABOUT dangerous sense.
... in the sea especially is cause apprehensive problem ...
... make the seabirds is usinguse the sight and ...
KEEP WRITING :)
