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Networking - strong ability to make and maintain the network. Show how to use it in the future.


judi_soares 2 / 6  
Sep 26, 2017   #1

maintaining my network



I strongly believe that one of the pillars of networking is to be able to get help to help other people and based on this belief I have been almost seventeen years creating and strengthening my network of contacts.

In my current profession, which is project management I have been working for about seven years, of which four are only as Planning Coordinator, having worked in three major construction companies and in three important Brazilian states. This has given me the great possibility to create a wide and strong network of contact allowing to help other colleagues and being able to help me too. I often get leads from former colleagues with whom I have worked on past experiences who ask me for advice, propose partnerships and even work placements. As for example, I already developed a work with a former college colleague, she developed the architectural project I made the budget and the planning of this same construction, worked very well to the point of even thinking about establishing a partnership.

I believe that international experiences - by traveling, exchanges or some specialization course - are also extraordinary opportunities to expand a network of contacts and bring a broader worldview, which is very enriching. Last year I was in Canada and once again I was able to expand my network of contacts.

Becoming part of the Chevening community, I believe that the global connections for future leaders and influencers are a great advantage that will be essential for my personal network and career development. By having friends who share the same ambition, I can learn from them and share my experience, thereby enriching and further developing my leadership and networking skills.

I am committed to devoting my time to maintaining my network in Chevening thus creating a stronger relationship. I also believe that through this new network that can be created through Chevening I see real chances in helping more people share with them new knowledge and creating bridges so that they too can expand their networks. The specialization that I am seeking through the scholarship is still very incipient here in Brazil, so the benefits and the help are not hypothetical, in fact when I return to Brazil I will have a richly expanded network that consequently I will be able to help more and more people who are looking for the same knowledge.
haotran 2 / 6 1  
Sep 26, 2017   #2
Hi Judi

I think there are many grammatical errors in your essay. You should check them carefully.
1. is to be capable of helping other people
2. "I have been almost seventeen years creating ..." => ???
3. "In my current profession, which..."
4. bring me a broader worldview
OP judi_soares 2 / 6  
Sep 26, 2017   #3
@haotran

Thanks, I'll correct them.
TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Sep 26, 2017   #4
Overall, to me your essay sounds too general. You have one specific example, but even that is a little vague. I think it would be more convincing to have specific details about how networking has helped you and allowed you to help others. Then the benefits you expect to get from Chevening are also very general. In fact, it seems like they could apply to almost anyone, in almost any field, so try to tailor it more specifically to your particular skills and goals.

Here are a few additional corrections I would make:

I have spent almost seventeen years

of which four are only as Planning Coordinator, {this is a little confusing or odd to me - why "are only" here?}

wide and strong network of contacts allowing me to help other colleagues who can likewise help me too.

I have worked on past projects who ask

in helping more people by sharing with them new knowledge
OP judi_soares 2 / 6  
Sep 26, 2017   #5
@TJLuschen

Thanks. I'll consider all the recommendations that you give me when I rewrite my essay.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,678 4113  
Sep 27, 2017   #6
Juliana, your networking essay is so faulty that it could be discarded by the reviewer for non-compliance with the prompt requirements. This is the one time in all of the Chevening writinjg activities that you need to show the development of your networking skills. Provide at least 3 solid examples covering your academic, professional, and socio-civic networking skills. Why cover these 3 aspects? You need to convince the reviewer that you can provide a network that will help promote Chevening upon your completion of the program. Remember, the last aspect of the prompt asks you how you can use this network to help promote Chevening and help the future program participants? That is exactly why you need to convince the reviewer that you have an existing network that you are not only currently using, but also, that you can use to help promote the program and assist the scholars in your capacity as a mentor in the future. A general description is good, but should only be one paragraph to kick off the essay. The reviewer needs at least 3 paragraphs of specific examples to even consider your essay within the prompt parameters for consideration.


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