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The New Power Of Collaboration -TED


Giansy11 18 / 32 5  
Sep 26, 2016   #1
Communication has related with media and collective action. Nowadays, media gives more information about anything that human needed to do something. Media comes from several shapes that had been supported by internet, make easier in every particular areas, such as agriculture, commerce, education and another one.

As the time goes by, media publishing cannot separate from printing press, a broadcasting station, a community or a market place, all of these things had evolution rapidly.

The effect of this phenomena is "social dilemmas" , where people stuck in hard situation caused by range of possibilities that available on their situation.

Furthermore, people should be able to find out their own way of their problem, they must be wise to come out from the effect of communication by media

akn_24 1 / 2 1  
Sep 26, 2016   #2
Hi there, I found some grammar, active/passive voice, subject/object missing, singular/plural mistakes and incorrect use of tenses. Here are my corrections:

Communication has been related with media ...

...media publishing cannot separatebe separated from printing press

...make it easier in every particular ...

...all of these things had evolutionhave evolved rapidly.

...where people stuck in hard situations caused by a range of possibilities that is available on their situations .

...people should be able to find out their own ways of (solving, dealing with) their problems ...

I hope this helps. Have a good day!
Iedha01 21 / 40  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Hi there,
As far I concern, there are some grammatical issues in your summary. I suggest you to vary your vicabularies. Let me give examples,

-Communication has RELATED WITH media and collective action. ( it must be RELATED TO)
-Media comes from several SHAPES that had been supported by (...) commerce, education and ANOTHER ONE. ( I think the word SHAPE in the sentence above is not suitable and ANOTHER ONE, you can change it into OTHERS or MANY MORE ) Your sentence should be = there are several sources of media which support by internet....


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