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WRITING TASK 2: New technologies and ways of buying and selling


Katta_78 1 / 1  
Jul 21, 2021   #1
NEW TECHNOLOGIES AND WAYS OF BUYING AND SELLING ARE TRANSFORMING THE LIVES OF CONSUMERS.

TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS OPINION?



In this day and age, customers' consumption has been affected distinctively by technological advance and innovative trading methods. In my opinion, I partially agree with the statement as several positive and negative changes can be arisen from this common tendency.

On the one hand, introduction of technology and means of buying and selling would make our lives more utility and straightforward, especially in social distancing by COVID-19 pandemic. More and more online trading networks, such as Shopee and Tiki, have appeared, which is frequently used by consumers of different ages. People would order easily on online and pay their parcels by credit. Their parcels will be delivered to their home so fast. Since we do not need to go out to buy nourishment and necessary goods or contact face-to-face with strangers, we could avoid suffering from Corona virus.

On the other hand, this phenomenon also has drawbacks. This is illustrated that speed of technological development has grown significantly, which makes the old people not adapt immediately. Besides, citizens who do not have smart phones or other electronic devices connected with the Internet would be impossible to trade goods on online. Places are not equipped with modern technological infrastructure, such as rural areas and mountainous regions, which disrupt online purchase. As a consequence, they would prefer to use traditional methods, include stores, market, and so on, to buy products rather than depend on new technologies or electronic devices.

In conclusion, new technologies and trading methods help people buy and sell goods easily, particular in COVID-19 pandemic. However, we could not deny disadvantages of this trend, which is inconvenient for the old people or the one not being good at technologies.
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Jul 22, 2021   #2
The writer wrote allspouse paper that is unrelated to the topic. While the writer provided a measured response as an opinion statement in the first paragraph, the topic focus of the response was incorrect. Thus, the essay will recieve a failing score based on an unrelated response. There was a clear change in topic focus as the following comparison reveals:

Original Topic: NEW TECHNOLOGIES AND WAYS OF BUYING AND SELLING ARE TRANSFORMING THE LIVES OF CONSUMERS.
Your Topic: ... several positive and negative changes can be arisen from this common tendency.

The student has a different topic in mind for the discussion ( positive and negative) from the actual presentation ( transforming the lives of consumers). The correct discussion focus would have been:

I completely agree that modern gadgets have changed the way people come to own and trade things.
OP Katta_78 1 / 1  
Jul 22, 2021   #3
thank for your response!


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