Hi Aida.
Let me help you with sharing my insight about this. Actually, there were a large number pf grammatical errors. However, in this moment, I only wanna focus on your content in this essay. Please, make you sure that you get my points and review those.It gets more attention when government give a suggest to have a small family which has 3-4 members
I suggest you remove that above. It does not relate to the question. The first step which you have to do is underlining keywords of prompts. You should be aware of being not out the topic.Besides that, you see this
Small family tend to be easier to organise the family future plan than the large family.
There was an odd thing. It is because you make your statement unbalanced. The question asks you to explain detrimental and positive effects of having the big family. However, you only mentioned one side.Small family usually has a minimalize house just one car
You make your paragraph more screwed when you added that. I really you wanna explore your idea, but you have edges of the topic. Fortunately, it cannot support your idea topic.
The small family is easier to estimate their income and plan
Small family tend to easier in organising the family future plan
You are supposed to avoid this style to explain your opinions. It seemed like listing. The good essay includes the ideas suppoted by reasonable statement. If you commit that, the readers will reckon it is a layman's opinion.Large family usually found in rural or village
I am afraid you will the low score if you do not pay attention to task achievement. That wants you to review the drawbacks of the small family. As we can see, you tended to focus on the big family.I really appriciate your endevours. For the beginner, it is not bad. I strongly believe that you will show a better progress on condition that you wanna provide much time to review the example of writing task 2 and practice more and more.
Keep spirit
GOOD LUCK
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