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[IELTS Task 2] Newly-invented technology VS the role of teacher at schools.


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Oct 11, 2014   #1
Some people think computer and the internet are important in children's study, but others think can learn effectively in school with teachers. Discuss both side and give your own opinion.

Hello ES users, I'm gonna take the IELTS test as soon as possible, so I need several actionable pieces of advice.
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Education is a valuable investment for a great future. For this reason, several people argue that the newly-invented technologies are the significant aspects in children's study. However, critics claim that the great place to educate young people is at formal education. Therefore, I believe that both points of view have different perspectives.

Thanks to advanced technology, there are some advantages for schoolchildren. Firstly, technological devices in the classroom have undeniable links to academic performance. It is clear that the use of computers is the precursors to improve students' ability in computer science. In addition, computer and the internet arouse children's interest in new lessons. So, they will gain the novelty to operate a smart application such a word processor for writing report which is useful for their future. Lastly, the internet is an ideal place to do research. It provides many online resources which help students to acquire much detailed knowledge quickly.

However, schools engage many professional teachers in order elevating children's intelligence. Schoolteachers play an essential role to teach their pupils and to control children behavior in the classroom. Take William Henry Perkin, inventor synthetic dyes, as an example, he secured a place at one of the country's most prestigious seats of learning to read chemistry. Perkin's teacher identified his as having unusual intelligence and remarkable mental agility and his teacher encourage him to attend a series of lectures. In this opportunity, Perkin presented the impressive speech and made some expert breathtaking. From this reality, there is no doubt that schools are the effective place for children's education.

In conclusion, the development of latest technologies address some parents to channel their children with some sophisticated devices in educational area, whereas it is imperative that teachers' role in school cannot be changed by computers and the internet. Having said and that, I strongly deliberate that schools should concern in the collaboration between technological and traditional approach.

gbekil 7 / 17 2  
Oct 11, 2014   #2
tiaDS I really understand your side until I read you conclusion; I think you can add one more paragraph to make you side stronger.
Your supporting details and examples are very good.
vangiespen - / 4,140 1449  
Oct 12, 2014   #3
Tia, you have created a good essay that shows tremendous improvement over your past work. While the grammar remains an issue, the thought coherence is beginning to take shape and you are able to now get your points across in your own unique way :-) Keep up the good work. I will be making my comments and suggestions below.

Education is a valuable investment for a great future. For this reason, several people argue that the newly-invented technologies are the significant aspects in children's study. However, critics claim that the great place to educate young people is at formal education. Therefore, I believe that both points of view have different perspectives.

- With the emergence of new technologies such as online learning and e-distance education, there has been a growing belief that the internet and computers are far better avenues of study than the traditional teacher based education. There arguments to the contrary however, stating that the traditional teacher based education is still the best way for children to learn. Being a child of both worlds and generations, I feel that both avenues of learning are important from different points of view.

Thanks to advanced technology, there are some advantages for schoolchildren. Firstly, technological devices in the classroom have undeniable links to academic performance. It is clear that the use of computers is the precursors to improve students' ability in computer science. In addition, computer and the internet arouse children's interest in new lessons. So, they will gain the novelty to operate a smart application such a word processor for writing report which is useful for their future. Lastly, the internet is an ideal place to do research. It provides many online resources which help students to acquire much detailed knowledge quickly.

- If we were to look at the technological advances that have allowed people to continue to pursue their education via non-traditional means, we will see that the very same traditional requirements such as attendance, quizzes, and homework are also applied, but in a more relaxed setting that allows the student to learn at his own pace. The existence of the computers and the internet also means that the students learn more because of the easily accessible information pertaining to their lessons. That is something that does not exist in a traditional classroom set up.

- Tia, considering discussing this essay as a compare and contrast essay because you need to show the benefits and drawbacks of each type of learning environment.

However, schools engage many professional teachers in order elevating children's intelligence. Schoolteachers play an essential role to teach their pupils and to control children behavior in the classroom. Take William Henry Perkin, inventor synthetic dyes, as an example, he secured a place at one of the country's most prestigious seats of learning to read chemistry. Perkin's teacher identified his as having unusual intelligence and remarkable mental agility and his teacher encourage him to attend a series of lectures. In this opportunity, Perkin presented the impressive speech and made some expert breathtaking. From this reality, there is no doubt that schools are the effective place for children's education.

- Traditional schools with teachers require the students to learn at the same pace, which results in some students not learning as well as they should be.This is because teachers are faced with a multiple students per class so they cannot devote individualized attention to the students, thus hindering the learning process for others.

Traditional learning methods also limit the knowledge that the students can acquire to only what the textbooks and teachers can share with them. Other than that, they have to become an autodidact in order to learn more about the lessons that interest them.While students using new technology to learn have the freedom to go beyond the limitations of teacher and classroom teaching. They are allowed the freedom to learn as much as they want about topics of particular interest to them. This proves that technology has widened the learning horizon for students when compared to the traditional classroom set up with a teacher.

Teachers are still used as moderators and sources of additional knowledge in a technologically set up classroom. However, they find themselves with the freedom to teach the students in a more effective manner because of the seemingly individualized set up for the classroom. Students can use email, chat, or class discussions to ask additional questions without fear of holding back the class or looking less intelligent than the others. Without teachers, the new technology classrooms will be ill effective because there won't be anybody around to help direct the students towards the right learning direction.


- I added to your discussion just to show you how you could further develop your information in a compare and contrast manner. You need to be able to determine when a comparison essay is required for an essay such as this one.

In conclusion, the development of latest technologies address some parents to channel their children with some sophisticated devices in educational area, whereas it is imperative that teachers' role in school cannot be changed by computers and the internet. Having said and that, I strongly deliberate that schools should concern in the collaboration between technological and traditional approach.

- It is because of the aforementioned reasons that I believe that the new technology method of teaching students will slowly become the preferred learning method of the future. Teachers will always be an important part of information sharing and teaching so eventually, the traditional method will find itself merged with the new style of learning in the 21st century as technology makes learning more enticing and interesting for the students to absorb new information. In my opinion, there is no competition between new technology and the importance of teachers in the learning set up of students.

- I did not really see a solid personal opinion from you in the paper so I thought I would show you how to develop one prior to presenting your conclusion. I hope you don't mind :-)

Now you can develop a proper conclusion that will adhere to the conclusion requirements of essay writing :-) I hope I was able to help you as well as you expected :-)


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