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IELTS TASK 2- Newspapers have an enormous influence on people's ideas and opinions.


truebypass 1 / -  
Apr 11, 2016   #1
Q. Newspapers have an enormous influence on people's ideas and opinions. Is it a desirable or undesirable situation?

Newspapers nowadays have become an indispensable part to acquire information compared to other resources in the modern life. Some people advocate that it is beneficial for people to accumulate knowledge, while others consider that it will deprive people of their thoughts. Indeed, in my stance, there are some drawbacks of the newspapers.

The first and most important reason is that people's thoughts are easily influenced by newspapers. That is, people are passive to absorb the information and tend to mimic the opinions from newspapers. For example, people with hustle and bustle lifestyles are too busy to verify the truth of the topics in newspapers. Meanwhile, those information are widely use in every field which has a strong impact on every age. In the long term, people are likely to lose their judgement.

Another reason is that most of newspapers are controlled by political parties and served the authorities. It is easy to provide biased reports and manipulate the reader's prospectives on the vital issues. Furthermore, it is common to use entertainment news or celebrity secrets to divert public's attention away from the government scandals, economic problems, unemployment, crimes and so on. It allows people hardly to focus the main issue and may be harmful to country's development.

In conclusion, newspapers have been integrated into our daily life and has a strong impact on the way people gain knowledge. There is no denying that people will lose their thoughts and ideas if they passively absorb the information from newspapers. For the great regret in lives, people should cast a discriminative eye on it.

Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Apr 11, 2016   #2
Hello truebypass

I think you should consider applying the following stylistic adjustments to the text:

Newspapers nowadays have become an indispensable part to ... As of today, newspapers continue to remain one of the main sources of information.

Some people advocate that it is beneficial for people to accumulate ... Some people consider this state of affairs thoroughly appropriate while others do not quite agree.

Indeed, in my stance, there are some drawbacks of the newspapers. In my opinion, there are indeed some disadvantages to reading newspapers.

The first and most important reason is that people's thoughts are ... First, people appear to be easily influenced by the latter.

That is, people are passive to absorb the information and tend to ... That is, individuals tend to think of whatever they read in newspapers as such that represents an undisputed truth-value.

For example, people with hustle and bustle lifestyles are too busy to ... Partially, this can be explained by the fact that most people do not bother to verify information, contained in newspapers.

Meanwhile, those information are widely use in every field which has ... One's age does not seem to affect his or her behavior, in this respect.

In the long term, people are likely to lose their judgement. In its turn, this prevents people from being able to form their own opinions about things.

Another reason is that most of newspapers are controlled by ... Second, newspapers promote the agenda of those that they happened to belong to.

on the vital issues. on vital issues

it is common to use entertainment news or celebrity secrets to divert ... newspapers are used to divert people's attention from the issues that do matter, such as...

It allows people hardly to focus This makes it quite impossible for readers to focus...

and has a strong impact and as such, they have a strong effect on...

For the great regret in lives, people should cast a discriminative eye on it.You should probably just remove this sentence... it's not very intelligible.

I hope it came of help. Regards.
justivy03 - / 2,370 607  
Apr 14, 2016   #3
Hi Garth, I would like to share additional insights to your essay and, yes, WELCOME to Essay Forum.

1st paragraph
- Newspapers nowadays havehad become
- to the other resources
- inof the modern life.
- Some people advocate that it is beneficial for people to accumulate knowledge, while others consider that it will deprive people of their thoughts. Indeed, in my stance, there are some drawbacks of the newspapers.

2nd paragraph
- people with hustle and bustlebusy lifestyles
- topics in the newspapers.
- whichthat has a strong impact

There you it Garth, I leave the last couple of paragraphs for you to practice editing the essay yourself, following through the ones that has been suggested in your essay. This practice is very helpful and will definitely be useful in your future writing pieces.


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