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The Number of Computer Science Students from Native and International Student at a UK University


Sari Trisna 7 / 11  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
The bar graph shows the number of both sexiest Computer Science students from native and international student at a UK university since 2010 until 2012

Overall, it can be seen that there were 2 kind of students : British home students and international students. It was noticeable that the number of native students were the highest compare than international student both of female and male during 3 years.

British male students stood at around 40 in 2010 and then plunged to around 25 in 2011. By 2012, the number of students increase to around 40. On the other side, the female students who came from British rose from around 30 to 45 since until 2012.

Between 2010 and 2012, the number of international male students rose from 20 to around 40. During the same period, the females also ascended from 15 to 20. The most of Computer Science students at UK university came from British area to compare with students from overseas over the whole period.




Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hi sari. I have some advice for you

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Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 38 3  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Hi Sari Trisna

I would like to correct some words in your essay

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andika_soppeng - / 16 2  
Sep 29, 2016   #4
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sari Trisna

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