You need to learn how to do several things before you can actually begin to show improvement in your writing:
- Familiarize yourself with English grammar rules in relation to writing. Specifically in relation to singular V. plural word usage
- Learn what a sentence subject is, why it is important to sentence writing, how to properly place it in a sentence.
- Practice sentence drafting based on proper information presentation.
These are the preliminary basic lessons you need to learn in order to improve your writing skills. These are also the existing presentation problems in your current essay, which is why I am calling your attention to it.
different forms of education setting
Which are? Your summary overview is incomplete and lacks quick information references.
being woman an men is obvious
Serious grammar problem in relation to Singular V. Plural.
Incorrect usage of an indefinite article (an) when a conjunction (and) should be used. These errors could cause a failing GRA score.
being female and male do in nursery
I'm not sure what you mean. This will lower your C + C and GRA scores.
You should work on improving the areas I indicated above to help improve your writing skills and score. You are not within passing score range at the moment.
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