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IELTS; Number of Heart cases of in England during four decades(1960 to 1990)


Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
Jul 1, 2013   #1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of cases of heart diseases in England during four decades(1960 to 1990). It can be clearly seen from the graph that the figure of heart patients was highest in 1970 and 1980.

According to the graph, the cases of heart diseases were only 100 in 1960 and 1965, however, they started growing gradually up to 200 in next five years(1970). But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years. However, this number stayed at the same level in 1980.

The incidents of heart diseases started to decline steadily to 300 in 1985 and dropped even lower to 0 in 1990. This figure remains 0 in next five years(1995).
To sum up, the figure of heart diseases in England changes dramatically from 100 to 500, stays there for a while and then suddenly goes back to 0.




kuz7204 2 / 3  
Jul 1, 2013   #2
The graph shows the number of cases of heart diseases in England during four decades(1960 to 1990). It can be clearly seen from the graph that the highest figure of heart patients was in 1970 and 1980.

According to the graph, the cases of heart diseases were only 100 in 1960 and 1965, however, they started growing gradually up to 200 in next five years(1970). But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years. However, this number stayed at the same level in 1980.

The incidents of heart diseases started to decline steadily to 300 in 1985 and dropped even lower to 0 in 1990. This figure remains 0 in next five years(1995).
To sum up, the figure of heart diseases in England changes dramatically from 100 to 500, stays there for a while and then suddenly goes back to 0.

The text is well-written with a proper structure and needed nuber of words. Maybe, my opinion as non-proffessional won't help, but I wouls say it is 7 band essay. No mistakes, cohere, good vocabulary, but unfortunately a bit too easy
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jul 1, 2013   #3
According to the graph, the cases of heart diseases were only 100 in 1960 and 1965, ; however, they started going up/risinggrowing gradually up to 200 in the next five years(1970)

But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years

...This continued to increase prior to reaching a high of 500 in 1975.

To sum up, the figure of heart diseases in England changes dramatically from 100 to 500, stays there for a while and then suddenly goes back to 0.

... To sum up, the figure for heart diseases in England experienced a period of wild fluctuation.
I hope these help!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 2, 2013   #4
The graph shows the number of cases of heart diseas s in England during four decades(1960 to 1990).

The graph illustrates the statistics of people who suffered from heart diseases from the year 1960 to 1990.

however, they started growing gradually up to 200 in next five years(1970). But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years. However, this number stayed at the

......, however, this number increased in next five years recording 200 heart cases in the year 1970.

But this trend went sharply up in 1975 and the figure of heart patients raised to 500 in just 5 years.

This figure kept a sharp upward trend until 1975 with an increase of 500 patients in next five years.


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