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The number of overseas pupils graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001-6


anggicaroot 20 / 19 3  
Nov 10, 2015   #1
A breakdown of the proportion alter in the number of overseas pupils graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006, a 5-year period is illustrated in bar chart. Overall, there were upward trend in all of provinces, with exception in Alberta. In any case, the number of New Brunswick saw the highest percentage, while the figure for Alberta decreased slightly over the period.

Graduate numbers rose during the 5 years and reached their highest levels in 2006, but there was a minimal drop in Alberta graduates. In 2001, the number of foreign graduates in New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, Quebec stood at around 7%. However, by 2016 there had been more significant growth in three provinces numbers. That year, they rose to 8% (Quebec), 10% (Nova Scotia), 11% (New Brunswick) as the largest proportion of International graduates. Thus the gap between 2001 and 2006 in the number of three provinces had widened.

A more detailed look at the graph reveals that the overall growth in numbers in Manitoba and Newfoundland & Labrador had similar pattern. It experienced a gradual increased by 7% from 2001 to 2006, compared to 6% for Ontario. As the same way, the number of overseas students graduated in British Columbia rose markedly to 10% in 2006. In contrast, that was followed by a period of about five years, when number fell just over 4% Alberta. However, other graduate numbers saw their strongest growth rate, and this was well above the increases that had been seen in the end of period.




shintacandrade 10 / 74 87  
Nov 11, 2015   #2
A breakdown of the proportion alter in the number of (1) overseas pupils (2) graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006, a 5-year period (3) is illustrated in bar chart.

1. The proportion OR the number? it is a different equation, so make sure the units of measurement you use.
2. As far as I am concerned, and it is based on Cambridge dictionary, the term of 'pupil' means a person, especially a child at school, who is being taught. If what you mean here is a person who is learning at university, better you write it as 'student'. Be careful of using synonym, this is a major mistake lots of beginner do. Do not use them if you are not sure of their usage since they may give a very different impression and meaning if used inappropriately. To deal with this issue, I suggest you to check the word in a thesaurus book or dictionary before uploading your essay so as that you know how to use the word.

3. Do you want to use an appositive for this phrase? There are many ways to use the appositive correctly. One of them is when the appositive interrupts the sentence, put commas after and before the phrase. Therefore, it should look like this: ... from 2001 to 2006,a 5-year period,is... (see the way I put commas)


Hope this helps ~ Shinta
Arundyna 12 / 16 2  
Nov 11, 2015   #3
let's me give you little corrections
for the first sentence

An explanation regarding the percentages of scholar international graduates from universities in eight provinces in Canada for two separate years, 2001 and 2006 is elaborated in the bar chart.

you can change the word "pupil" to scholar it will be proper word


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