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The number of participants in education and science program in 1980 and 1990 based on a survey.


ZiadRasyid24 10 / 15 3  
Aug 30, 2016   #1
The charts report the number of participants in educational purpose and science program in 1980 and 1990 with the develop and advanced country as the based survey.

Overall, advanced country have bigger number in all aspect of educational and science than develop country. There are many significant increase in all aspect for advanced country in the decades. While the develop country have a little improvement or decreasing numbers.

Advanced country have dominated an all aspect. In the years of schooling program show longer period by over 8 years and peaked up at 11 years. In the other hand, develop country show less number between 2 and 4 years.

For the number of scientists and technicians they collaborate with a huge numbers of people between 40 and 70 thousands. In contrast, the other just less than 20,000 people.

In the funds of research and development programme, advanced country giving lots of attention with around 150 billions and doubles in last decades. while develop country less interest on this programme and decrease the number from 150 to 125 billions.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
ZiadRasyid24, it takes some time to understand the report writing without any graph. This way does not help you much since readers cannot even give you valuable feedback.

the develop and advanced country as the based survey

developed and developing countries as per the survey.

advanced country have bigger number

The language is not natural, as the grammar problems appear nowhere. The developed countries contributes significant numbers in ....

There are many significant increase

Significant increase was seen in ...

While the develop country have a little improvement or decreasing numbers.

the figure for developing countries showed a slight improvement on...

Advanced country have dominated an [...] show less number between 2 and 4 years.

These sentences are written in inappropriate English language, and therefore this will cost you much, as your score ranges between 4 and 5. I suggest reading sample answer as many as you can and learning basic grammar in order to pass the exam with flying colors.
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 30, 2016   #3
you should put the picture of the chart

advanced country have has

There are many significant increases in all aspect
In the years of schooling program show longer period => i can not really understand this sentence. you may mention the year clearly

For the number of scientists and technicians

develop country=> you need to use adjective form of 'develop'. Developing or developed country


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