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[IELTS Task 1] The Number of Travellers Using Three Major Airports In New York City


akhfan 5 / 9 3  
Dec 14, 2014   #1
The bar chart reveals about New York City visitors at three kinds of airport namely John F.Kennedy, LaGuardia, and Newark. It was measured by millions for six-year period between 1995 and 2000.

Generally, it can be seen that the number of passengers at John F.Kennedy airport fluctuated around six years until the end of period whereas two others airport witnessed a steadily increase. Another conspicuous trend was that LaGuardia airport became the favorite selection at the end.

Specifically, John F.Kennedy airport had the number of travelers at 26 millions then it went up to 47 millions in 1997 as the peak of its passengers. It indicated John F.Kennedy airport higher than two others only in 1997.In 1999, there was the declining trend to 32 million while LaGuardia and Netwark airport had significant growth. By contrast, at the end of time frame, there was a slight evolvement of John F.Kennedy airport to 44 millions.

Besides, LaGuardia airport started at 35 millions then it rose year by year until 1999 and climbed significantly around 70 millions. Newark airport also grew gradually for the next three years. It began at 16 to 42 million and remained stable for the last three years.




fadlanmuzakki 15 / 49 36  
Dec 15, 2014   #2
evolvement

do you mean it is involvement ??
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Dec 15, 2014   #3
The bar chart reveals about New York City visitors at three kinds of airport namely John F.Kennedy, LaGuardia, and Newark. It was measured by millions for six-year period between 1995 and 2000.

The bar chart gives the information about the visitors at three airports in New York City and is measured in million, a 6-year period between 1995 and 2000 .

Generally, it can be seen that the number of passengers at John F.Kennedy airport fluctuated around six years until the end of the period whereas two others airports witnessed a steadilysteady increase. Another conspicuous trend was that LaGuardia airport became the favorite selection at the end.

Besides, the total of passengers in (1) LaGuardia airport started at 35 millions then it rosewas rising (2) year by year until 1999 and climbed significantly around 70 millions. Newark airport also grew gradually for the next three years. It began at 16 to 42 million and remained stable for the last three years.

1. There is talking about the total of passengers which rises significantly. So, you cannot mention LaGuardia which stated.
2. use simple continuous for describing the things which grow continuously.
3. It will be an impressive writing if you can compare and contrast the data.


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