IELTS[WRITING TASK 1] The number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

The line chart illustrates how many people visited 4 international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Overall, there was an increase in the number of visitors who visited the Louvre and the Vatican Museums, with the most dramatic rise seen in the figure for the second one. While the Shenzhen Museum seemed to be no change and the London Science Museum had suffered a big drop. In addition, Louvre was the museum which had the highest number of guests visited throughout the period.

8 millions people were visiting the Louvre in 1980, with a subsequent increase to shy of 10 million in 2015. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for the Vatican Museum, which witnessed an upward trend. From 1980 with just around 5 million visitors, it had been twice as much as when it came to 2015 with the amount of 10 million people, nearly the same as the number of guests visiting Louvre in the same year.

The amount of Shenzhen Museum's tourists started at approximately 4 million, after which it experienced a progressive decrease to around 3 million in 2000, before ending the period at 4 million again. Meanwhile, the figure for London Science Museum was at precisely 4 million in 1980 and stayed still to 5 years later it seen to have a downward trend and then ending the period at the number of 2 million visitors.

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The summary overview is incomplete as it does not mention the value reference of the data as collated. The trending paragraph should be limited only to the high and low reference. This is not a paragraph that allows for a comparative analysis. The comparison should be integrated into the analytical report paragraphs. The summary should only highlight scannable information from the image. A quick representation will suffice. Do not overdo the trending reference as was done here.

Avoid the use of archaic English words such as "Millions". Modern English grammar rules dictate that an S at the end of large and specific numbers is no longer needed when indicating the value. Therefore,



is the correct reference for the values in this report. An S is only added when uncertain values are mentioned (e.g. millions of people, hundreds of dollars) as per analytical considerations. The early numerical reference is incorrect but the writer corrected the value title later on. He should have corrected the early reference to avoid LR and GRA deductions in relation to the specific word usage.