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Ielts Writing task 1: the number of visitors going a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017


mandypear 1 / -  
Nov 1, 2021   #1

Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island



The graph indicates the number of visitors going a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. Both the number of visitors staying on cruise ships and those staying on island are increasing. Overall, The total number of people visiting Caribbean island generally higher than those staying on cruise ships.

The lowest number of visitors is in 2010, for visitors staying on cruise ships are 0.25 million while those staying on island are 0.75 million.
The number of people remains unchanged for those in island at 0.75 million. In contrast, tourists who stay on cruise ships has increased to 0.5 million.

There is a rising trend in staying on island since 2011 until 2013 and reach 1.5 million which is two times higher than those staying on cruise ships, 0.5 million.On the other hand, the number of visitors on cruise ships is fluctuated.

From 2012 to 2017, there is a surge in the number of tourists staying on cruise ships and reach 2 millions, which is the highest number. The number of visitors staying in island, 1.5 million, is lower than those staying in cruise ships since 2016.

All in all, the number of tourists visit Caribbean island is increasing.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,308 3991  
Nov 2, 2021   #2
are increasing.

Kindly note the indicative years in the report. It ended in 2017. We are now in the year 2021. The time frame reference is incorrect. Use the past tense reference next time. This is inaccurate grammar use.

Caribbean island generally higher

Missing the third person indicative word "is" before "generally". Another grammar error.

is in 2010

staying on island are 0.75 million.

There is a rising trend

cruise ships is fluctuated

The writer shows a steady unfamiliarity with time references. There is a continual use of present tense presentations where pastreferencing should be made. These repeated GRA errors maybe the very reason this task will receive a failing score.

The writer spends time analyzing the essay but fails to edit his work. The grammar errors are very noticeable and should have been easily corrected upon first and second reading.


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