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The number of youngsters reading newspapers or watch the news is declining. Reasons and solutions?



vinu460 2 / 1  
Jan 19, 2018   #1
In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?

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today's youth is not interested in local/global news



I was wondered when I read the recent survey about the interest in the youngsters reading newspapers or watch the news. The survey reported that in many countries 70 percent of youth are not showing interest neither to read nor to watch the news. Only 30 percent are willing to read or watch the news.

In my view, one of the major reasons for lack of interest in the youth is they are more attracted to social media like face book, twitter and so on. They are spending much of their time in reading posts, chatting with friends and tweets. Electronic gadgets are drawing the youth interest. Young people are likely to text in WhatsApp, browse internet in mobile phones. Also they are not interested to know what is happening in the society because they are busy with their studies and parties. The parents are also not encouraging their childrens towards reading the newspaper. In the survey some were expressed that newspapers are covering more news about the politics so they are not keen to follow the political news.

I think some of the solutions are parents, schools and colleges should motivate their childrens or students to read the newspaper. It would be better if the schools or colleges allocate daily 15 minutes time to read newspaper before commence the classes also make newspapers are available in the libraries. The young people spend most of their time in college cafeterias and restaurants so it would be good if we arrange some televisions which telecast news. Also government should take some necessary steps and arrange facility to telecast news in public places airports, railway stations and bus stations. Most of the youth use mobile phones so we have to encourage them to read e-newspapers in mobile and tablets.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15224  
Jan 19, 2018   #2
@vinu460 even though you wrote 297 words for this essay, you will not pass the test. The reason you will not pass is simple, you are not discussing the essay as per the original prompt requirements. Your opening statement deviated from the original post because it indicates a totally different form of discussion based on a totally non-existent source. The source you chose to represent in your paraphrase totally changed the way that the essay was to be discussed and what the topic for discussion was. The correct paraphrase is:

Various countries have shown a trend that indicates a lack of interest in printed news and television news programs among the youth. I believe that there a number of reasons for this situation. In this essay, I will be discussing the reasons that I believe have caused this lack of interest in obtaining news among young adults and how it can be resolved.

This is supposed to be a 5 paragraph essay but you only wrote 3 paragraphs. So formatting wise, you will also lose points. The fact that you did not really discuss any reasons, but rather, merely listed a series of reasons, without appropriate supporting explanations shows that you did not understand the instructions. It also indicates that you are incapable of presenting a coherent and cohesive English based discussion. Sadly, your badly developed reason paragraph will drag down the good work that you did in the possible solutions discussion paragraph. You would still have received a failing C&C score because of the discussion development problem your essay has.

The rules the discussion of any of these essays are simple:

1 reason = 1 paragraph discussion (topic sentence, reason for validity of chosen topic / reason, supporting explanation, examples, transition sentence)
*Fully developed discussion = 5 paragraphs

* A full paragraph discussion is never less than 3 sentences but no more than 5 sentences.

Using the above guideline, you will be able to score highly in the LR, C&C, and GRA sections because you can prove your ability to think and function in an English setting based upon your fully developed, outlines, and explained individual topic paragraphs.
OP vinu460 2 / 1  
Jan 19, 2018   #3
@Holt
Thank you so much


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