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The occurrence of heat loss and energy waste in the house comes from many household appliances


yika 6 / 12 1  
Dec 7, 2016   #1
The process of air leaking out of and into the house

The process of air leaking out of and into the house which effect in the losing heat and the wasting energy process in the house that illustrated in the diagram. Overall, the process of air leaking out of the house comes from the electrical outlet and in the opposite, the process of air leaking into the house entering by circulation window in the each of home.

Firstly, the process of heat is lost and energy wasted in the house comes from many room devices, like the electrical outlet, crawl space, and outdoor faucet. These things use many energies which then produce heat and finally this heat will encourage out of the house by the spaces in the area of the house and automatically air in the outdoor enter into the house which it is called the process of air leaking into the house.

Secondly, another phenomenon is the process of air leaking out of the house which it can happen if there is nothing hot which is produced by other devices in the home and also it occurs by circulation spaces in the home such as the door and window at the home.

Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Dec 7, 2016   #2
Hi, there are several mistakes in your summary:

1.The process of air leaking out of and into the house which effectaffect in the losing heat (...) process in the house that illustrated in the diagram.

2. These things use many energiesenergy(energy is uncountable) which then produce (...) heat will encourage ( encourage what? ) out of the house by...

3. it is called the process of air leaking into the house. --> to the best of my knowledge, based on Cambridge, leak is a liquid gas to escape . improper if you use leaking into the house.

4. I suggest you in body 1 explain about types of enter ways and body paragraph 2 tells about exit ways of the air.

Keep writing and break a leg!
Abrahamlincoln 54 / 56  
Dec 7, 2016   #3
Dear Yuri
Here, my corrections toward your writing

I found that there are several words are totally similar with the mentioned vocabulary on book, you have make proper paragraph to show that you have an array of vocabulary. If you copy 3 similar words from the passage it can be included as plagiarism, Therefore I hope you try to change any word from the question in order to get band as you expected. Furthermore, you have to able to distinguish whether it is countable or uncountable vocabulary, I found that there are several mistakes about it. Please do check your vocabulary before you write a word.

Good Luck
kurnia 4 / 5  
Dec 8, 2016   #4
Hello yuri,
Here my advice for you

The process of air leaking out of and into the house which affect >> (effect is noun > using affect is suitable for your sentence because is verb )

I think your sentences, consist of many error grammatical and repeated words, if you want to repair your essay, you must start from vocabulary spelling and grammar such as sentence agreement and singular plural. thanks
OP yika 6 / 12 1  
Dec 8, 2016   #5
The process of air leaks out and into the house which affects in the heat losing and energy wasting is illustrated in the diagram. Overall, the process of air escapes out by upper of the house, while the air outflow process into the house enters from down space in the each room of the home.

Firstly, the heat is lost and energy is wasted in the house through the ceiling on the first floor and other spaces on the roof, then air escapes through the attic hatch when it enters in the middle room and also through two recessed lights which are located above kitchen and bathroom. Finally, heat will out of the house by the spaces in the area of the house.

Secondly, another phenomenon is entire of air into the house is from several parts which located in down position in the house, like through the vents which have been installed in several parts such as kitchen vent and dryer vent. Moreover, It comes through windows and doors into rooms in the house through dryer vent, crawl space, and outdoor faucet.


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