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Some offices has put ban on smoking in workplace. What do you think?


behieli 7 / 19 4  
Apr 14, 2016   #1
Some businesses now say that no one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

The harmful effects of smoking are absolutely proven; the social and educational systems are trying to aware and alarm the society of deadly effects of it. Yet, smoking takes the lives of thousand every year; it seems that compared to huge investigation of companies on cigarette advertisement, the educational system has not achieved significant successes in persuading people to abstain smoking.

However, due to its disadvantages for both the smokers and others, specific regulations are conducted to prohibit smoking in public places and workspaces. This rule has arouses some supporters and debaters. This essay will discuss the reasonability of this decision

First of all, scientific results show that smoking has more serious harms for people who are close to smokers than to those who smoke. It can cause breath diseases, different kinds of cancer and allergies in long course of time in people who are exposed to smoke of the cigarettes. The smoke of cigarette also can deteriorate the health conditions of who diagnosed with breath diseases, such as asthma.

For these reasons, prohibiting smoking in public places is a absolutely reasonable attitude. Though authorities do not have the right to interfere with private life of individuals, they have to protect the public health by conducting proper measures.

Secondly, although many addicts argue that smoking helps them to concentrate, sooths their nerves and reduce their anxiety while they work, it can be disturbing for other people around them. The smoke and odor of smoking is irritating for many and in work places it can interrupts their concentration and hinders them from working.

As a consequence, it reduces the productivity in workplaces. Verifying these complaints employers legislate proper laws to prevent the upcoming pauses in the work process.

Additionally, smokers in public environments encourage the young to smoke. Society is responsible to provide its young generation a proper model. Therefor, it considers high standards to abandon in in public places and workspaces and specific charges should be considered for breaking this law.

Peter_Tim - / 9  
Apr 14, 2016   #2
hello. please consider your grammar and sentence structures. it can be helpful if you gave someone to proofread. i would also advise you to cite and reference your work well. thank you
OP behieli 7 / 19 4  
Apr 14, 2016   #3
@Pete_Tim But what grammar mistake have you noticed?!
Peter_Tim - / 9  
Apr 14, 2016   #4
for example for chapter one

... the social and educational systems are trying to inform and alert the society about its effects. Yet, smoking takes the lives of thousands every year and it seems that, compared to huge investments of tobacco companies on cigarette advertisements , the educational system (...) persuading people to abstain from smoking.

...This essay will discuss the reasons behind this decision.
suxiaojing 13 / 18 7  
Apr 18, 2016   #5
Behieli:
Hi, here are some mistakes and suggestions:
1.This rule has arouses some supporters and debaters.
2.It can cause breath diseases----it could be better:respiratory disease
3. sooths their nerves--- it should be soothes

hope that can help you!
Tedd 1 / 1 1  
Apr 18, 2016   #6
Hi there ! These are my few suggestions:

1. Additionally, smokers in public environments encourage the youngyouth to smoke.
2. Society is responsible to provide its/the young generation a proper model.
3.Therefores,
4.it considers high standards to abandon in in public places and workplace and specific charges should be considered for breaking this law .
Words in blue are the ones I'm trying to figure out the meaning. What do you want to say? As a reader I find it hard to make out the meaning of the sentence.

Words in green are the ones I find weak in expression. This is my idea: strict punishments should be implemented for those who break the laws.


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