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The officials of Canadian universities have high variety in allow international students to graduate


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Mar 16, 2014   #1
The given chart reveals inquiry regarding a comparison in percentage of overseas student graduating from universities in the field Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

Overall, the differences of graduate student proportion sought in 2001 and 2006.Thus reversing gaps in the two years question occurs, universities in Alberta province were solely graduating more collegian in the outset.

Turning to the detail, by comparison with all of provinces, New Brunswick stood favorably as the top notch provinces throughout the time which graduate 7 per cent overseas student in 2001 then climb nearly 12 per cent in 2006.

However, in 2001, Nova Scotia coming second with 7 percent student studied there then followed by Quebec, Alberta, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland-and-Labrador and Ontario province as the least 3 per cent chosen by international pupils.

A closer forward look at the year 2006, the similarity percentage revealed that 7 per cent pupils graduated from Manitoba and Newfoundland-and-Labrador provinces while 11 per cent students obtained their degree in Nova Scotia and British Columbia. Therefore, the three provinces, Ontario, Quebec and Nova Scotia officially allowed international student to graduate almost more doubled, length 8-to-9 percent, than such percentage in the previous year.

Interestingly, while News Brunswick stance as the top most percentage in overall time, British Columbia student percentage grow significantly in increasing international graduation. Therefore, Alberta province shows a diminishing percentage ever.

We can conclude that the official of Canadian universities has high variety in allow international student to graduate.




Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 16, 2014   #2
Well, I feel your essay is bit too long for this task. It's ideal if you had two body paras (the ones that contain details) with the introduction and the overview. It should contain minimum 150 words, but I feel you should not exceed more than 175 words. These tasks have a time constraints so that you need to manage time efficiently too. It is good that you pay attention to all these aspects during your practice sessions :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 16, 2014   #3
The given chart revealsinquiry regarding a comparison in percentage of overseas student graduating from universities in the field Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

Well, again a real bad word "INQUIRY" :(
Although an inquiry refers to an act of asking for information, it is generally used for a close examination of a matter in a search for information or truth. The police makes inquiries to find the true culprit. But here, it is no such case and the word should have simply been "details"

You have to get rid of this habit of trying new words without knowing their real meaning. It is better to use simple words rather than having your sentences becoming meaningless.


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