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One way to restore our body and mind is traveling. Article summary - Traveling


Ucha MSN 17 / 26 4  
Oct 27, 2016   #1
One way to restore our body and mind is traveling. This is because experiencing favorable place can raise our joyful. Besides, traveling becomes a perfect time for restarting our busy daily activities and losing our weary. Spending leisure time in weekend in or out of our environs brings spirit and inspiration from surroundings.

In addition, having chance to travel a place that we have never gone before is not only about self-reflection, but also meet a new atmosphere. We are able to communicate with native people and learn about their culture. As the result, we can built a new relationship and create useful community.

fauziyahtami 22 / 38 6  
Oct 27, 2016   #2
Hello,
Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion

==> ... body and mind is traveling(travelling) . This is because experiencing favorable(favourable) place can raise our joyful. Besides, traveling (travelling) becomes a perfect time ...

Spending leisure time in (the) weekend in or out of ...
==> In addition, having (a) chance to travel a ...
As the result, we can built(build) a new relationship ...

*you did some typo, you have to watch your words
*better yet if you explain more so reader will understand your summary clearly

Good luck and keep writing :)
dils 20 / 33 2  
Oct 27, 2016   #3
Hi Ucha,

Your writing is actually just a good one, you have your ideas inside of your head about traveling. Related with that, in the case of your development it will be important if you have more lexical resource to support your ability in writing.

In addition, this is few suggestions for you:

... body and mind is traveling.
... body and mind condition is with traveling.

... perfect time for restarting our busy daily activities ...
... perfect time for restarting from our busy daily activities and losing our weary.

Spending leisure time in weekend in or out of our environs brings ... .
... in weekend either in or out of our environs will bring spirit and inspiration from surroundings.

Good luck.


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