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Online Studing - Positive or Negative? - IELTS Writing Task 2


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Nov 29, 2019   #1

distance learning evaluation



In these days, distance learning has aroused people's discussion. People can get their diplomas, degrees or certificates at home by studying online courses, which has been provided by many universities and institutions. Some people think this trend is a negative development; however, I would argue that its advantages are more significant; thus, this is a positive development.

On the one hand, studying online has some disadvantages. Firstly, most of homework and assignments are individual tasks, which means there are no group works or discussions. This leads to the fact that learners will finish the course with little or no experience in terms of working in group, which is one of the most important soft skills in real life. For example, most online business alumni lack involved experience of working in group, which leads inefficiency of implementing projects. Secondly, since some majors require many experiments such as Biology or Bio-medical Science, students need to come to university laboratories to conduct those experiments; hence, face-to-face classes are mandatory. It seems impossible to only study at home with these courses.

On the other hand, I believe distance learning has many benefits. The first one is that students can arrange their timetable themselves in order to study whenever they want. This is extremely helpful for people who work and study at the same time, as well as who have small kids but still want to reach for higher education. For example, one of my friends whose 2 small kids just got a diploma in computer science after 2 years studying online. Additionally, since the online courses are designed for students who live far away, learners can save a huge amount of money for accommodations, as well as a great amount of time for traveling. My best friend, for instance, who is a business analyst, claimed that he saved roughly $24,000 for 4 years studying a bachelor degree in University of Houston - one of the top schools in Texas, USA.

In conclusion, I believe the advantages of online studying outweigh its disadvantages, and this is a positive development.

Maria [Contributor] - / 1,032 371  
Nov 29, 2019   #2
@thinhvuduc1210
Hi there. Welcome to the forum! I'm here to give you feedback on your writing - and I hope that it somehow helps you out!

Firstly, you could have easily improved the first parts of the writing if only you had focused more on simplifying your utterances. For instance, instead of shifting around with varied types of terminologies, it would have been better if you stuck with only using online studying as it is more appropriate and commonplace to use in these situations. This would make your content a lot less baffling in the long-run because it will show how dedicated you are to the rest of the text. Sticking with these sorts of appropriate content will go a long way in being clearer.

Furthermore, the concluding remarks also have to be improved. Considering that you had such bulky texts, it would have been way nicer if you inserted more depth into this part of the writing to ensure that you are relaying the information in a clearer light. If you are able to do this, it would make your writing appear more put-together because the conclusion is imperative for the rest of the writing to become tied together.


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