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OPINION ABOUT SHOPPING ONLINE


Gnad 2 / 4  
Jul 19, 2017   #1
Hi everyone, this is my practice of writing an opinion paragraph. Hope you can help me make it better. Thank you

Writing a paragraph to clarify your opinion about shopping online. Do you think its benefits will overweight its risks? You should write about 150 words.

shopping online is a great solution for promoting economic



I am in favour of the idea that shopping online brings numerous facilities not only for sellers but also for customers. With the increasingly fast development of the Internet, social medias and websites such as Facebook, Twitter or Instagram, shopping online becomes easier than ever. First, because everything is selling online so sellers do not need to rent or buy any place for setting up and decorating a shop. They just need to photograph their products and post those pictures to social websites with an attractive caption. In addition, advertisements may be not required, when their customers are satisfied with their goods, they will share and write good reviews. Second, buyers can search and choose anything they want just by clicking and scrolling their mouses. All information of the product includes size, color, material and more are described in its product introduction with attached pictures. Finally, in my point of view, shopping online reduces unnecessarily intermediate steps and is the base of strong e-commerce. To sum up, for these reasons, it seems to me that shopping online in right way is a great solution for promoting economic.

YuAnne 3 / 6 1  
Jul 19, 2017   #2
Hello Gnad, I appreciate this paragraph because many details are included to support your opinions. This also inspires me.
I wonder if there are some grammatical mistakes in it, like in these two sentences:
First, because everything is selling (or sold?) online...
All information of the product includes (or including?) size, color, material and more...
Holt - / 7,527 2001  
Jul 19, 2017   #3
Nguyen, when you write an opinion about any topic, there is one simple fact that you have to remember. In order to have an opinion, two sides of the discussion must exist. The side that is against your opinion and the side that your opinion supports. Both sides must be first introduced in your statement before you can present your opinion and the justifications that support both the discussion that you support and your personal opinion. I do not see any reference to the opposing opinion in the introduction of your statement. Therefore, the opinion becomes bias or one sided, thus weakening your opinion because you are not ready to defend it against the opposing side. An introduction of the opposing side and then your opinion that refutes the other would have been sufficient enough to have created an excellent opinion paragraph. By anticipating the opposing discussion and presenting your opinion that could very well beat the opposing opinion, you will be able to safely write an effective statement of opinion. Remember, your opinion can only be made stronger by the weakness of the opposition. So first discuss the opposing opinion and then point out the flaws in that opinion in order to create a picture of a strongly worded point of view on your end.
OP Gnad 2 / 4  
Jul 19, 2017   #4
@YuAnne
THANKS, I GOT IT

@Holt
THANKS FOR YOUR ADVICE.
USING OPPOSITE OPINION LIKE A LEVER. I LIKE THIS IDEA.
I WILL TRY TO WRITE A NEW ONE


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