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The opinion I disagree with, that spending money on the arts is a waste


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Sep 17, 2022   #1

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts



Arts is one of the most important aspects in life. I disagree with the opinion that spending money on the arts is a waste. It has a separate role in the society, arts will improve the mental health for a certain group and that contain the story or the culture of the civilization.

First of all, when society develops, it is the time for people to have more intention about their mental life. Arts is one of the ways that free their soul. For example, a picture can describe many different feelings, each person will have to feel a part of the meaning that the author wants to demonstrate. Harmony of soul helps people to fulfill their loss of soul or it is simple to satisfy the people who have a passion for the arts. Not only the picture, but also other artwork helps to develop the mental health of people. So, governments spend money on the arts which are the ways to help inhabitants reform their mental health.

Secondly, arts will change during each period, it contains many meanings of history. Each of the different regions has a distinct way to express themselves separately, it is the reason why arts is one of the best ways to understand a civilization's history. The researcher depends on others remaining on the arts to learn about the culture, other relations and events in history. Thus, it is incorrect to say that the government's investment in the arts is a waste of money.

Conclusion, Arts bring to many the advantage and it is to difficult to summary that government should invest other better than those. It is because the arts not only improve mental health for people in society, but also help researchers find out other factors to understanding many things in the past.
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Sep 18, 2022   #2
Creating an immediate discussion point in the opening statement has created a failing TA score for this particular paragraph. The first paragraph is a requirement that needs to represent all of the original information using a different set of words. So the fact that the "government" was not mentioned in some way in this paragraph has altered the prompt topic and created a prompt deviation will will result in an automatic failing score. That is, in addition to the personal opinion presented in the opening sentence (another error), and the lack of a proper extent response are all reasons that the essay will be seen as not providing the correct answer format for the task. So the essay has already received a preliminary failing score that it may not be able to overcome. Next time, represent the original theme and response format first. Then do as you please in terms of discussion in the reasoning paragraphs, you cannot do as you please before then.


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