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Overall, transportation, housing, and food were the underlying utilities of all four countries.


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Feb 7, 2015   #1
The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.


The line graph provides a breakdown in term of percentage of five main categories which are Food, Housing, transportation, Health care, clothing of The United states, Canada, The united kingdom, and japan in 2009.

Overall, Transportation, housing, and food were the underlying utilities of all four countries.

When it comes to Housing and Health care, United states had a step ahead of all five countries with its 25 % and 5%, while these values are huger than a few percent of other countries. Food on the other hand was reckoned to be the highest in Japan which is about 23 %, this number is larger than United kingdom for two point five percent, while United states and Canada both are less than United Kingdom by approximately 5 percent. Canada managed to take the first place in Transportation and clothing since it possessed 20 percent and 6 percent, in the meantime, the gap between Canada and The United states when it comes transportation is about two percent, and the difference kept exaggerating for the rest two countries. Clothing somehow was almost identical for four countries for about 5 percent each relatively.

ajreyes 2 / 3  
Feb 8, 2015   #2
I think it will be very helpful if you attach the line graph. But I have some helpful tips for you to improve your essay.

Paragraph 1: Introduction explaining what the graph is all about + the trend/category that outstand the others.
Para 2: main body paragraph explaining the trends (increasing/decreasing/fluctuating)
Para 3: main body paragraph with comparing/contrast

just a suggestion for your essay to be more organized. hope this helps.thanks
OP Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Feb 8, 2015   #3
More advice would be helpful!


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