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- Do not exaggerate the given topic for discussion in the original prompt. Since you were not asked if the implied discussion topic is true or false in the original prompt, there is no need to refer to such a statement in your representation of the prompt. This was the only problem in your first paragraph. You did well enough in the response to the questions provided. While a discussion topic presentation would have garnered you a higher TA score, the restatement of the discussion instructions will also be an acceptable presentation in that section. It will not increase your TA score to the extent that the outlined response would have, but it will help your TA score just the same.
The reasoning paragraph was well developed until the last sentence in the presentation. The topic in that section was not fully explained, defended, nor supported in your presentation paragraph. That single error in presentation in that paragraph automatically made it under developed, resulting in minimal point deductions, but deductions nonetheless. Never add a topic you cannot fully develop alongside the other topics. Do not risk receiving point deductions. You never know if the percentage deduction might prevent you from receiving a passing score.
The results paragraph and the conclusion are acceptable and show that you are capable of properly developing discussion presentations in a manner that will be clear to the reader. You also avoided making notable GRA errors in both paragraphs so your score will benefit from the "clean" presentation of those sections.