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'Being parenthood is very proud in married life' - Parents are the best teacher


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
May 4, 2014   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement parents are the best teacher. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Being parenthood is very proud in married life. This becomes a fun new experience in a new life. Most parents are very proud of their children. So, as to make them forget that too loving child can ruin their personality. Most of parents teach their children based on what they get from their parents and based on knowledge they have. Teach children to give them a valuable lesson for future.

Children imitate their parents do. They are witness any behavior that their parents did. Parents are the best teacher for their children. If each parents is showing bad attitude to their children, So that the children will demonstrate stubborn character and messy from parents. If parents show good attitude towards their children then their children will be obedient to their parents and their environment. Children remember every command and word spoken from their parents and apply in their daily lives.

In the other hands, many parents are not aware of this case. They do not realize that their child is more is more intelligent than what they imagined. Most of parents see that a children as a little weak who can't do anything alone. Children are more sensitive than adult. They observe any expression that we show them.

konaren 1 / 2  
May 4, 2014   #2
Essay should be further expanded, and the grammar should be checked in many of the sentences. For example:
1. Children imitate their parents do. -> Children imitate their parents.
2. Children are more sensitive than adult. -> Children are more sensitive than adults.

Also, watch your overuse of the word "children." Although it is the topic of the paper, try to use synonyms or pronouns more often.
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
May 4, 2014   #3
Most of parents see that a children as a little weak who can't do anything alone.

Better if you write >> cannot
Write more upinipin.. minimal 250 words.. :)
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 4, 2014   #4
Helo, friend

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement parents are the best teacher. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

... In this type of prompt, you should mention your position, do you agree or disagree about

parents are the best teacher

. Probably you can state.. I agree that parents are the best teacher even though children could learn from their schoolteacher or their course tutor.

Engaging with task responses in IELTS is very important. Even though you have excellent structure or length of advance lexical resource, good mark is difficult to achieve without fulfill the task response.


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