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Parents are the best teachers? YES! 'mother always give you motivation, and love'


ridwan 8 / 16 2  
Mar 26, 2014   #1
As we know that role of parents important to growth youngster because father always give her adoration to her child which it never change anything. There are many factors about children of growth be better at around circumstance that its influence from father become the best teachers to children.

Everybody in the world will need parents because they always become the best educator and they hand out the study to walk, to talk, and study about love. That all studied based on their adoration because parents are the first teacher to youngster. For example, when the children have age ten months, he said "MAMA" or "PAPA". It is clear that the parents' always hand out more study to their children other that they can growth become a success and he has good attitude. So the statement about parents are the best teacher is right because everybody feels about it.

Attitude is important to youngster because it determinant future of children. Father always hand out study about attitude to her child, however attitude is important to children. For example, my friend has a bad attitude because he is naughty but their parents keep adoration. All mothers think that children are award. So father always to advise if children are naughty. It is example clearly that the roles parents also important for determining child's attitude and the parents influence youngster's attitude.

Some of people said the parents are friend to juvenile because they near with her mother. There are many kinds why are parents as friend to children? Because they discuss place if children got trouble, parents play friend, and sometimes study together. For example, If you who got trouble can discuss with your father, because parents like an angel, and they become solved problem.

In conclusion that parents are the best teacher where mother always give you motivation, and love. Parents not only the best teacher, but also friend to children.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Mar 26, 2014   #2
So the statement about parents are the best teacher is right because everybody feels about it.

Hi... Mr. Ridwan, you should put coma after "so"
idok 1 / 2  
Mar 27, 2014   #3
"Father always hand outstudy about attitude to her child"
there are two verb and make me confused.
Bob brother 15 / 22  
Mar 27, 2014   #4
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MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 27, 2014   #5
You should include the full prompt of the essay so that we can give you more meaningful comments.

As we know that The role of parents important to growth youngster because father always give her adoration to her childwhich it never change anything.

This has grammatical issues and is quite confusing, especially the bold part as it doesn't explain why parents play such an important role?

There are many factors about children of growth be better at around circumstance that its influence from father become the best teachers to children.

Again, I don't get your idea here.
You had better revise your grammar carefully as I found many grammtical mistakes in your essay.
ernhy 17 / 28  
Mar 29, 2014   #6
As we know

I think after "As we know" always put comma.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Mar 29, 2014   #7
It is clear that the parents' always hand out more study to their children other that they can growth become a success and he has good attitude.

Hello brother, I think if you use to, you should verb expression after using to.
Sigit_EngLearn 2 / 6  
Mar 29, 2014   #8
because father always give her adoration to her child
There are many factors about children of growthbe better at around circumstance that its influence from father become the best teachers to children.
kukuh 4 / 6  
Mar 29, 2014   #9
the roles parents are also important for determining child's attitude

because it is determinant future of children.

Parents are not only the best teacher, but also friend to children.

Hi, bro,, I think you need to be careful about Subject + Verb.
OP ridwan 8 / 16 2  
Mar 29, 2014   #10
Thank you Mr. Wandering for your comment.

I will to repair my grammar and i will study again about grammar.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 1, 2014   #11
ridwan, you should mention what type of your writing, whether it is ielts or toefl essay, so that the readers will know easily when they want to correct this essay
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 3, 2014   #12
As we know that role of parents important to growth youngster because father always give her adoration to her child which it never change anything. There are many factors about children of growth be better at around circumstance that its influence from father become the best teachers to children.

This shows complexity for the intro.
Possible suggestion: If you have a complete prompt, simply paraphrase it (then include a hook and thesis)

Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph essay. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. This can help you write more words, but some students, that I see, put grandiose ideas, by writing too many words.

Look at what Dumi suggests you with the structure (a 4-paragraph essay). With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly, one content paragraph for, and one againts. This is good for coherence and cohesion between the sentence-to-paragraph-to-essay construction, and for which in the five-paragraph structure this is weak.
juliajonk5 - / 1  
Apr 4, 2014   #13
mother knows best... as always:)


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