I am preparing for IELTS can you please comment on my essay
Parents make the best teachers.Do you agree or disagree with this statement.Explain your answer.
I have changed the first paragraph of the essay, hoping that you can read it and grasp some of the reasons why I have made some of the changes. Perhaps it might help you if you were to read "The Elements of Style," as I see that you have at least formatted the essay with some reason. Go over the first paragraph and then get back with us. I think that you are on the right track!
A good teacher or a good mentor is the one who guides the child how to live a successful life.I donot agreee to the statement that parents are always the best teachers.In my opinion, it depends on the circumstances of the child, to determine who is his or her best teacher.In some cases the best teacher may be the child's school teacher or in some other case it may be the child's friend or even someone else.
--> Try this: A good teacher or a good mentor is one who is available to guide a child and teach him how to live a successful life. Personally, I do not agree with the statement that parents are always the best teachers. In my opinion, it all depends on many of the child's circumstances, and in some cases, the best teacher for a child may be the child's school teacher or in some other cases, it can be the child's friend or even someone else.