Both my parents are 100% Indian, but you wouldn't know just by looking at me

Both my parents are 100% Indian, but you wouldn't know just by looking at me - MIT Essay (100 words)

Sep 28, 2014 #1

Both my parents are 100% Indian, but you wouldn't know just by looking at me. When I was one, our family moved to Ghana. I've been exposed to a multitude of cultures, and my Indian relatives gripe that I've lost my roots. However, I believe I've forged my own identity from the parts of each culture I love. I'm not just a demure Indian wallflower who has a flair for biology. I'm also a radiantly assertive, easily excitable Ga woman. I may not be beautiful rose or a sweet- smelling lily, but I'm proud to be a hybrid.

Essay prompt- Please tell us more about your cultural background and identity in the space below (100 word limit).

This is my first draft. Any tips are appreciated.

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Sep 28, 2014 #2

Both my parents are 100% Indian, but you wouldn't know just by looking at me.

I would rater write: My parents are 100% Indian, but looking at me, you would never guess.